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Hand Me Down
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0 posted 2001-04-20 03:26 PM


Some of this may be kinda weird and hard to understand I guess, but its just how I felt, LoL.

I let you down
Let me pick you up
I let you down
Let me climb up you to the top
So I can see the view
From up there
Tangled in your hair
I let you down
Forgive me
You give me love
I let you down
Let me walk with you maybe I could say
Let me talk with you
Open up, and let me through
Don't walk away
I have no lid upon my head
But if I did
You could look inside and see whats on my mind
And oh, its you
I'm a puppy for your love.

"Cause I can't fix something this complex anymore than I can build a rose"

© Copyright 2001 Jeffrey Chase - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-04-20 05:42 PM


Awwwwww...a puppy for your love, that's sho shweet! I love it.  
  ~Carly

There is pleasure in poetic pains which only poets know......~Unknown

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2 posted 2001-04-20 05:49 PM


Awww! that was really cute   Great job, keep posting

*dq

-=We often get hurt when we trust someone we want them to be instead of who they really are=-

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3 posted 2001-04-20 08:17 PM


Sweet concept.  You'll get a warm response from the Teen #4 ladies.     hehe

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

Fading Away
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4 posted 2001-04-20 10:51 PM


This is soo sweet!!  I loved it!  I hope you gave it to her!

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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5 posted 2001-04-21 12:00 PM


not bad my friend, not bad at all.  seems like you got the grils goin on this piece    Thanks for the nice read and keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

MindlessPoet
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6 posted 2001-04-21 12:49 PM


that was sweet

*TiMMYBoY*
Yeah, that's me.  The Weird One.

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7 posted 2001-04-21 01:56 AM


AND from the teen #4 guys!
Sweet poem!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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8 posted 2001-04-21 01:57 AM


great poem...also sweet..nice job
man....u gettin all the gurls love

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

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