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0 posted 2001-04-14 01:15 PM


Thief.

I’m what’s left, the filtrate,
An ostentascious overlord,
In to their homes I infiltrate,
I take what I can’t afford,
I mastermind my own schemes,
I’m a modern Robin hood,
I steal peoples hopes and dreams,
I live down by Old Sherwood,
I aqquire my possessions,
To furnish my taste,
It’s become an obsession,
And much goes to waste,
I’ve never been caught,
But there is a price on my head,
With dangers I’m fraught,
But I’m always one step ahead.

Andrew.

" No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe."

© Copyright 2001 Andrew Sewell - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-04-14 02:25 PM


wow this was awesome~went together very well. cant wait to see more. keep it up

*dq

-=We often get hurt when we trust someone we want them to be instead of who they really are=-

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2 posted 2001-04-14 02:59 PM


"ostentascious" how am i suppose to know what that means. (pout)lol.

it was great i got everything else, the whole Robinhood thing fit very well in this poem.
great work!

Regina

a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain

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3 posted 2001-04-14 07:42 PM


LOL @ Regina    
This was good, Zu.  Very interesting theme.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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4 posted 2001-04-15 01:13 AM


This was fine....felt that the last line had more syllables than the rest of the poem. I liked the poem thought. Not yer best....

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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5 posted 2001-04-15 09:14 AM


I'll agree and say that this one isn't your best... but still a fine job, Andrew.  Nicely done.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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