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A Pile of Moss (from age eleven!)
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A Pile of Moss (from age eleven!) |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg 
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(haha... something from my fourth writing year, age eleven. just had a vague memory of it, decided I'd share. See what you think. I've come a VERY long way.  REMEMBER now, I was a kid.)"A Pile of Moss" A pile of moss, he ate my boss. He ate my boss, that pile of moss. A pile of moss, he ate my dental floss. He ate my dental floss, that pile of moss. A pile of moss, he ate my best friend Ross. He ate my best friend Ross, that pile of moss. He ate my boss, my dental floss.... and my best friend... it's no big loss. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
ROFL ... thanks for the grins Allan, that was cute! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
I always enjoy a good laugh! This was really cute  Thanks for sharing.*Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
So you ARE human. Thanks for clearing that up for me.  ~AF~ "To alcohol! The cause of - and solution to - all of life's problems!" Homer Simpson |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Correction-- I ~was~ human, at age eleven. If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
How cute!! Once when I was 9 I wrote this poem about the sun. I found it the other day and started reading...the whole time thinking OMG I wrote that??? Well it was kinda funny now even if I was trying to be a serious poet at the time. Very cute, keep writing!! Luv Always, ~*~Priscilla~*~ How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you," but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it???? |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
LOL! That's hilarious. Not bad for a kid Bel |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
HAhahaha that was hilarious  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
LoL!! I love this one ITs cute !!!! i dont know if i should cry because its over, or smile because it happened |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Yes it's very cute Allan, especially for 11 years old. "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, *gets up after falling out of his chair from laughing* great one |
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CLBinLOVE Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 147Hilton Head, SC, USA |
plain and simple, and funny too hehehehehe ok very funny *walks off chuckling* let the fighting words lie let the candle light die let the sun come up let the same imply ~EvE 6 |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Great poem, I love it!! "Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle" "Life's short. If you don't look around once in a while you might miss it." BothUnknown [This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 03-14-2001).] |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Hehe.. very amusing! I love it --Marie |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
LOL you told me this one before and I still have to smile when I read it. Things will get better just be happy with what has come your way today, and keep living for what may come the next.~ By Amanda inspired by Brian |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
This one's goin in the libary, not cuz of it's Amazingly-well-written factor(which isn't portrayed, haha), but because it made me smile. Who knows what would have happened if I didn't smile just now.....poooor ross..hahaha...... ~Carly "The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake." - Leonardo da Vinci |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
HA! Well, if you ever get sick of writing poetry, I think you might be able to pick up where Dr. Suess left off. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I think this is your best poem so far Allan "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
not bad, not bad at all... simply hilarious |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Awesome! This is dang funny. I think you were born a poet if you write this way at age eleven, lol. I could barely rhyme in poetry at that age, lol. I remember the painstaking efford I'd have to make every time I got an assignment to write a poem in school. Funny how interests change over time, eh? ANyhow, this is a very good poem. Congradulate the self of your past, lol. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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