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I'm sick with boredom...
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I'm sick with boredom... |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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I’m sick with boredom. A lonesome phantom, I’m missing Autumn with every atom. By every photo I’m made disheartened. Her hair – so auburn! Her heart – so ardent! As thought some potion gave me new passion, with strange emotion, I had a crush then. I loved the notion that we were rushing,-- each movement -- cautious! Her cheeks were blushing! She was my lover, but now it’s over. With her, I hovered,-- I’m sinking lower. I loathe love often,-- more with each hour. Her eyes then softened,-- now, they devour! Check out my poetry here: http://www.unknownpoets.com/db/authors/master |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Ouch, thats a sad one there. Sounds like an ode to a lost love? Pain doesn't last forever though, just seems like it... "Happiness is nothing without the contrast of sadness" >¶Øʆ< |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Seems like she ~tortures~ him now! Oucho... that can hurt. Nice to read from you again, Master. -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Nice nice nice. These are the things I like to read, not the subject but the writing itself. The whole theme was great, Im totally always bored. JeremY "I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.) |
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LucidityNow Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 118Canada |
With her, I hovered,-- I’m sinking lower. I loved those lines very much. You put an interesting twist on love poems... and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me... |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I seen you popping in and out of the forum. I'd like to see you post more in here. You have such talent, and it's so good to read you poems. Hope you decide to share more in here  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you everyone, it's a new style that I decided to try... I guess it came out ok. Thanx for reading! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I actually thought it rocked. I really enjoyed this poem. I think you should write in this style more. Sorry for the loss...  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thanx Dopey! Glad u liked it! |
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