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LucidityNow Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 118Canada |
I figured I would use this post to introduce myself, I am 17 years old, male, I live in canada. I love the idea of these forums, I think I am going to like it here. Hopefully I will get a picture of myself up soon. I just wrote this one tonight, hope you like it. "Few and Far Between" Every waking second pounds in my head like a migraine you cant rid yourself of... My life rushes towards me flying at moch speed only breaking now and then... I am dictated by time forever aging, ever dying I grow older as I write this to think this minute will never happen again... Experiences are everything Memories are tenfold more When time seems to stop and I know that always I will hold this minute in my mind I will take it to my grave Although few and far between these are the moments I live for... and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me... |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I'm so glad that you like Passions so much!  This is a wonderfully written piece of dark poetry. We all have times like this, but I hope you find those "moments worth living for" more frequently in the future! Thanks for posting.  "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Woah.......VERY VERY nicely written..... I really thought the verses of you saying.."to think this minute will never happen again...".......and "these are the moments I live for"..... Wow....nicely done there pal. I REALLY enjoyed those lines. bravo on you....keep posting here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
whoa, that sounds like a happy goth poem...you've done some seriously nice work and this is no exception. Keep posting. >¶Øʆ< |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Oooh... very VERY excellent poem. I love what you did here. "I am dictated by time forever aging, ever dying I grow older as I write this to think this minute will never happen again..." What a great thought... it is difficult to mention in a poem that you are writing a poem without it sounding cheesy. But you did it, man! I actually had to stop and ponder after reading this. Great job. -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I'm glad you like PIP Hope to see you more in here Wow!!! You have an amazing talent You're thoughts are different More philosophical approach You even got great reviews from Dopes  keep sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
"I am dictated by time forever aging, ever dying I grow older as I write this to think this minute will never happen again..." That was a great part, and allan already quoted it, but I decided what the heck, why not do it again. This poem was written well, it makes the reader stop and think, reflecting on their own lives. That' s what it did for me anyway. I like it, good job and I hope you stay here a long time to enjoy everything  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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