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Finding Life (senryu) |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Before Thought ~ Every man dies, but not every man truly lives. You brighten my world, in the darkness of decay. I found life today Dedication~ To a Dear friend of mine What comes with love are tears of pain. What comes with hate are brighter days~ Amanda |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice quote from braveheart. The senryu was very thoughtful for yer friend and I liked it.....showed how you truly feel.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
very nice... it really touched me  i dont think senryus are supposed to have rhyme? oh well, i loved it anyways! -JDR |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like this one a lot, great job on it    (sorry, I like the new smilies )"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker [b] http://www.thehungersite.com [b |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Dopey~ Thank you, Barveheart is my fav. quote. Jeremy~ Thank you for what you said. Senryus an not rhyme...hummm. Well it makes it more of a challenge ,no? lake~ lol @ the smiles. I LOVE them, please keep them up for me ok? And thanks for the comment it means alot to me. Sincerely ..... Destiny "Amanda" dont ask about the name thing, please!! THank you What comes with love are tears of pain. What comes with hate are brighter days~ Amanda [This message has been edited by Angel in Flight (edited 02-01-2001).] |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This sounds like somebody pretty special. I am glad that this person helps you to feel more alive. |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
amanda i think i read somewhere they are not supposed to rhyme, i am not criticizing you, just giving some information to you for future reference, i still loved it no matter what. -Jeremy R. "I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.) [This message has been edited by jeremydraul (edited 02-01-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
senryus CAN rhyme! what are you talking about? BONUS if they do! seriously, Jeremy, we are aware that you don't have to rhyme. you don't -HAVE- to, sure. But who cares if they do? It's just a nice little bonus. Are you saying that a senryuist (i'm sure that's a word) has to -avoid- rhyming in order to create senryu? I'm sure this is not the case. You don't have to, but sometimes it doesn't hurt. And you definitely don't need to avoid it. -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
good job on the senryu! i've never tried one myself - maybe i'll hafta give it a go sometime!! Luv Jo xoxo ps. i like how it rhymed a bit too * never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you* |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
lovely...you are an amazing writer and i'm glad you decided to come back I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Great job. It was short but to the point and effective. "WRITING IS EASY. ALL YOU DO IS STARE AT A BLANK SHEET OF PAPER UNTIL DROPS OF BLOOD FORM ON YOUR FOREHEAD." Gene Fowler |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
great poem!! it was lovely. |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
fractual~ Yes, this person is pretty important. luvnkris~ You really should try one sometime. They are very fun to do, and they also open wide a world of imagination. Acire~ Thank you. I appreciate what you said very much. It ment alot to hear that from you. Jer~ Thank you for your comment! Katherine~ Thank you for what you said! What comes with love are tears of pain. What comes with hate are brighter days~ Amanda |
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