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Fearless_Angel
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since 2000-10-03
Posts 57
Calgary, AB Canada

0 posted 2001-01-25 10:41 PM


Nightfall

The tides come in, the waves go out.
My soul drifts away into the ocean.
The pain fades off like the light of the day,
Leaving me in the black and hollow darkness.

The scar is deep and will not heal,
The voices never stop. They taunt me.
Tell what to do, I don't need them.
Leave me alone!

A web of fear entanlges my mind,
Overpowering my will to go on.
With one last sigh, I let myself go,
Allowing my last hope to slip away.

The fall is slow and the wind rushed by,
I close my eyes but not cry.
The last thing that comes to mind is,
My friends crying and screaming my name,
But it's so far in the distance.
Too far, outta reach...

To give up hope is to die away.
Leaving others in despair.
Maybe now they feel the pain and sorrow,
I went through everyday.
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"Take care and remember a certain innocent lil' Angel will alwayz be there for you..."




[This message has been edited by Fearless_Angel (edited 01-25-2001).]

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jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
1 posted 2001-01-25 10:44 PM


Uhm... are you published?
if not, this should be
sounds like one of the best, saddest poems ever, it really intrigued me
absolutely powerful, breathtaking to say the least

~JDR

"Is it love in my gut, or piss in my bladder?" -Allan Riverwood

anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US
2 posted 2001-01-26 12:23 PM


i agree with jeremy..an amazing piece..thanks for sharing

"When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro"


katherine
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since 2000-06-10
Posts 365
Canberra Australia
3 posted 2001-01-26 06:58 AM


This is an awesome poem!!! WOW!
really sad
keep writing!

Fearless_Angel
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since 2000-10-03
Posts 57
Calgary, AB Canada
4 posted 2001-01-26 12:41 PM


Hey everyone:
    Thanks for reading and getting back to me. As far as publishing goes, I am being published in February this year (2001) in a book called Nature's Echoes but the piece that is going to be in there is unfortunately not this poem. It is one that I posted a long time ago called Escape. Anyways, thankz everyone.

Lotsa Love,
Angel
xoxoxo

"Take care and remember a certain innocent lil' Angel will alwayz be there for you..."

Acies
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Twilight Zone
5 posted 2001-01-26 02:21 PM


I'm at awe right now
I envy your talent
JD has said it all
thanks for the wonderful read

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



Dopey Dope
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6 posted 2001-01-26 05:33 PM


I thought this was a nice one.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fearless_Angel
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since 2000-10-03
Posts 57
Calgary, AB Canada
7 posted 2001-01-27 02:30 PM


Hey Guyz:
    Thankz! Well, your feedback keeps me writing!

Lotsa Love,
AnGeL
xoxoxo

"Take care and remember a certain innocent lil' Angel will alwayz be there for you..."

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