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helen smith
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0 posted 2001-03-14 11:24 AM


He leads her to the naked beach.
Moonlit thoughts disrobe her.
Darkened waves are the only witnesses to
Searching hands beneath the frothy lace of the sea.
And they wont tell.

© Copyright 2001 helen smith - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-03-14 11:28 AM


Welcome! and ..........WOW.............so sensual......beautifully done! SEA
Irish Rose
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2 posted 2001-03-14 11:31 AM


Oh boy! (welcome) more!! more~!!!!!!!!

Kathleen Blake

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and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


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3 posted 2001-03-14 11:33 AM


Welcome
The beach, the moonlit thoughts, and the waves.
Really does paint a picture.



bernie

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4 posted 2001-03-14 11:37 AM


Welcome to passions enjoy the read
ethome
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5 posted 2001-03-14 11:41 AM


WELCOME! this is a very sensual piece and good writing!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

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6 posted 2001-03-14 11:43 AM


Truly excellent! This poem holds a lot of power.
Welcome to Passions!
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


jellybeans
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7 posted 2001-03-14 11:46 AM


no kidding, sensual...erotic...and to the point...nice stuff lady welcom
helen smith
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8 posted 2001-03-14 12:03 PM


really? tehheeeeee and I felt so rude showing it to you ......
Irish Rose
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9 posted 2001-03-14 12:29 PM


as a poet, I never say anything in reply I don't mean. This is fabulous, Rude?
NO! More.....more

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


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10 posted 2001-03-14 12:53 PM


Welcome!!! Truly superb...there's just enough mystery that the adventure beneath the waves could be fantastically sensual, as the poem is, or dastardly awful...keeping with just the tiniest element of suspense brought on by the words 'disrobe' and frothy foam.

Didn't I meet you on another board sometime in the past, Helen? You name's familiar.

Virginia Salter

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11 posted 2001-03-14 01:12 PM


Welcome to Passions...and? don't know about elsewhere? but here? there is a "shot" drink known as "sex on the beach" which by tradition, must be followed by a second shot, called "sand up yer..." well, you get the picture! (that stuff gets everywhere!)

Welcome!

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12 posted 2001-03-14 03:35 PM


A grand Welcome to Passions! Short, sweet and to the point! Made me smile! Check your e-mail for a special message!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




JamesMichael
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13 posted 2001-03-14 03:43 PM


Simply sensual Helen...James
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14 posted 2001-03-14 04:22 PM


Greetings
A Beautiful way to start out!


~*Peachy Be*~

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15 posted 2001-03-15 12:42 PM


Hi Helen,

I loved this little perfect gem, look forward to more please!! and welcome to Passions hope you enjoy your stay,

Love, Cerenity


"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



Waseem Cheema
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16 posted 2001-03-20 04:44 AM


It took me to the dreams.
It is I who took u there. ......Smiles


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