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Concrete Dream Concerto
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Concrete Dream Concerto |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Concrete Dream Concerto to build then allow balloons to dance in the sky stairsteps on their way to Elysian fields' delight rock or granite offering a foothold to heavenly skies of blue a man's gift to hold in soft regard all of the dreams within you feet on the ground holding love in one's heart and a song to long cling onto stairstep one to heaven with a melody on your lips stand solid allowing one to dream then loving words will slip be the rock to step one to the sky to play the music of one's soul a concrete dream concerto 02.10.01 Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
definitely in a minor. . . yes. . . a minor. . . I can hear it now my friend. . . this is excellent. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Wonderful write. I like the your form in this. Nicely done. Poeminister "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." -Plato |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
feet on the ground holding love in one's heart and a song to long cling onto a wish to build a dream on... love it Sunshine! ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Yes it's the excellent beginning of a concerto...the musical dreams of the breath of existence no matter where you are.........as usual a very creative write! Reality seldom bears the possibilities of imagination! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Good morning all...and thank you very much for reading.... |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
..."the music of the soul" May it always sing for you clear, unimpeded, bright. I do like this piece. While it may be true that "No man is an island..." You must admit there are some extremely large peninsulas out there. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
this is beautiful, I'm going to try this one on my piano!!!!!!!!!! "I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--I just love your music..and thank you so much, sweet one, for the lovely card..it is in my place for special things now.  |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari dear heart, Good morning to you, it's late afternoon here, and I've done with work well for today anyway. Utterly utterly fabulous. I can hear this echoing in a superb melody. Really beautiful work love outstandingly excellent Take care love as always Puck  Really super piece, and definitely a keeper, I know they all are Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
A beautiful musical way to start my morning, and I hear the strains of this floating on the wind.....you know I can't resist anything musical, my friend!!  ~~~ enjoy yourself ~~~ it's later than you think! [This message has been edited by Sunnyone (edited 02-11-2001).] |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
dreamy song concerto......yeah give me a dreamy one....wonderful thoughts and love the form. (hugs) Charisma |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you all for the beautiful comments....you've all made my day.....{~,^} |
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Melody Junior Member
since 2001-02-12
Posts 16England |
Sunshine this is a really beautiful poem written in the candance of a heartbeat, it has such a wonderful flow. I adore this one of course. Truly a beautiful piece love Melody But love me for love's sake, that evermore Thou mayst love on, through love's eternity Elizabeth Barrett Browning |
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