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Take This Chance-----written with Jesse Jaymz
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Take This Chance-----written with Jesse Jaymz |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Powered down by destiny Cant break these chains that shackle me I need a love to set me free Is that love I found in you I've looked forever for the key The only one that will let me free From all these lonesome memories Is that what I found in you Take my hand and let me bring Unto your heart these broken wings Tear down these walls and let me sing What true love was meant to be Love with me like never before Pick my heart up off this floor And it will love you ever more If you take the chance [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 02-06-2001).] |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
hun *hugs* i looved working with you. you are such a great poet and a wonduful person with an even better heart. thank you so much for all your support  and thank you for being my firend and this little guy,  is for you.  thank you for letting me write with you.love ya jesse True beauty is often hidden in darkness... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula & Jesse~ WONDERFUL ! Such a sweet and positive piece. Enjoyed and hope to see more. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Paula and Jesse, what a great write, so bound together I couldn't tell where one ended and the other began. write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Nicely done Paula and Jesse...i cannot tell either ..blended perfectly..  ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
what a wonderful write from you two....I really enjoyed it. great combination of inspiration. Charisma |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Yeah I couldn't tell who wrote want cause your chemistry is like bread and butter...in fact it felt like this piece was written by one person...anyways, this is a brilliant piece! Nathan |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
This was so beautiful. It flowed just like a gentle stream. Great work, you two  Mags |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
thank you all. and it was a blast working with paula. she is what made this flow. me i just tagged along. came up witha ryme here and there. thank you all for your compliments. i love them.love to all jesse True beauty is often hidden in darkness... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Paula dear heart, and Jessie, this is utterly wonderful, absolutely magic. And Jessie, I know she does the hard work, she did when she wrote with me. Absolutely a brilliant pairing. I love this truly Take care love as always Mushy  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Pick my heart up off this floor and it will love you even more if you take the chance." Very nice words from two...James |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Take my hand and let me bring Unto your heart these broken wings Tear down these walls and let me sing What true love was meant to be' Great work, guys! Wonderful! sp  ...if I ride these dreams to the Irish Sea, oh, even there, I know your heart rides with me... |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jesse...it was fun working with you...thank you Marge...Jess was fun to write with...thank you Kethry...the words just flowed together without thought...thanks Victoria...it was an easy piece to write...it went so smoothly...thank you Charisma...thnak you sweet lady your comments are very much appreciated Nathan...you are so very sweet to say such things...thank you Mags...it flowed from beginning to end...thank you Marsha...dont even girlie...LOL...thanks sweet sister mine James...thanks sweet friend...hugs to you sp...thank you you are sweet |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Paula and Jesse, This poem is absolutely beautiful. DawnG [This message has been edited by DawnG (edited 02-08-2001).] |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Very nice collaboration Paula and J Rich |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
nice to see members write together. Beautiful poem, hope to see more from you two I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
Dawn: thanks for stoping by. glad you liked it. spiked: thank you to. happy people like our work. acire: i hope to write again with paula soon. it was alot of fun. thanks for stoping by.  True beauty is often hidden in darkness... |
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