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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2001-02-02 07:15 AM


If you wish?
then wish it- BOLD.
Be willing, barefoot,
through the coals.

Begin you now
with pump of heart
breathe it--eat it...
make wishes ART.

Let the past be gone
and then
Let yourself belong
and when?
It comes undone?
DO IT AGAIN.
re-make yourself
yourself
my friend....

© Copyright 2001 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
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1 posted 2001-02-02 07:18 AM


serenity,
so well written with a pointed ending.
write on
Kethry


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



serenity blaze
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2 posted 2001-02-02 07:27 AM


AND? hand over heart...I promise to do the same.
spiked
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3 posted 2001-02-02 07:37 AM


"Remake yourself" seems something that we do everyday. You have written this wonderfully
Rich


[This message has been edited by spiked (edited 02-02-2001).]

snowpants
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4 posted 2001-02-02 07:47 AM


Hmm...excellent advice, serenity!  Great write!

sp  


'cause I want nothing more than to sit outside heaven's door and listen to you breathing...

doreen peri
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5 posted 2001-02-02 07:50 AM


it's a great poem, really..... i can't take the advice though.... i screwed up the first time, can't trust myself for a second...  
Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
6 posted 2001-02-02 08:13 AM


Thank you.

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
7 posted 2001-02-02 08:45 AM


if you wish....helen
Aimster
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8 posted 2001-02-02 09:12 AM


ser~
really enjoyed this! excellent write
and very catchy  

take care
amy


"A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart and can sing it back to you when you have forgotten
the words."


Sven
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9 posted 2001-02-02 12:51 PM


Exactly


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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

hoot_owl_rn
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10 posted 2001-02-02 04:43 PM


*Applauds Loudly* WOw, what a great piece. You know you have the rhyme and rhythm down when a poem sings itself when someone reads it and this one does  

~ Ruth
www.angelfire.com/pa/OriginalMinds/index.html

serenity blaze
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11 posted 2001-02-04 04:22 AM


I sure hope everyone still understands..I love you all so much...and THANK YOU.

yer lovely, yanno that?

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