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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Trace my letters with thy verdant fingers Each and every one Forget my words though the feeling lingers Until the rising of the sun, When poison from my pen that hath stained Will, with my written power, come to wane When you read my thoughts I come alive And I can feel thee As thine eyes caress, line after crafted line Absorbing completely Grant me for once, just one immortal night Whence I can see through thy unfiltered sight Speak aloud the phrases I unknowingly construct Making the sounds musical And after each painstaking syllable I self destruct, Becoming all the more invisible Until the whitened page transforms a canvas renewed For another artist with fervent strokes to be consumed Cursed be the fate of one for whom gold gathers rust When the moment has faded Cast me then upon a shelf to go gather dust And when thy mind no longer jaded, Resurrect me once again to read with freshened eye Saving me from countless verse where I, immortal lie |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Definitely, definitively, you are the Poem! Well done Sire! |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
Oh, that was absolutely haunting.  I like!~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thanks Sunshine, is that like "You are the Man!" ??? Thank you P.E. Your dragon haunts me as well. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
clever concept, and I like your style!!! You make the voice of poetry sing! Well done. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Trace my letters with thy verdant fingers Each and every one Forget my words though the feeling lingers Until the rising of the sun, ===================== When you read my thoughts I come alive And I can feel thee As thine eyes caress, line after crafted line Absorbing completely Grant me for once, just one immortal night Whence I can see through thy unfiltered sight =================== And after each painstaking syllable I self destruct, Becoming all the more invisible =================== Cursed be the fate of one for whom gold gathers rust When the moment has faded Cast me then upon a shelf to go gather dust And when thy mind no longer jaded, Resurrect me once again to read with freshened eye Saving me from countless verse where I, immortal lie ====================== you have just poetically defined it ... in perfect cadence, with rhyme divine. this is a very very cool write...most impressive ... very cool conception of thought. "Grant me for once, just one immortal night Whence I can see through thy unfiltered sight" EXACTLY poet sir ... exactly. Poetry is not an opinion expressed ... It is a song that rises from a bleeding wound ... or a smiling mouth. ~Kahlil Gibran~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
PoeticKnight, thou hast penned a verdant write full of poetry and delight the write in you is written true now onto my shelf for more of you. write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thank you all for replying. I appreciate the too kind words, especially you JM, thanks. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
PoeticKnight, very interesting write. Totally great concept. Loved your style in this poem.  "Cursed be the fate of one for whom gold gathers rust" .... love that line. among many others. Parker |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
You have penned the mind of a poem, the passion of poetry, an absolutely unique perspective. This is very creative and enjoyable to read THank you for opening these eyes to a new light Beautifuuly done Liz |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh What a wonderful verse...I loved the flow, the feel, the concept...and the truth...beautifully done!! |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Parker, Liz, Martie....you took my breath away. I am so honored and humbled. I'm glad you took the time to read this, hopefully I'll be able to continue to write more that you like. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy the read |
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