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WinterTalon
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since 2001-01-14

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Brooksville, KY, USA

0 posted 2001-01-20 08:10 PM

Keep in mind, if you're the type that gets offended easily, don't read on. I wrote this when I was frustrated and thought it was actually kinda cute. Doubt any of you will see it that way, but heck, I'm postin' it anyway!

Please don’t give me right or wrong
but poets just don’t get along!
We all express what makes us tick
and criticism makes us sick.

How does it feel to be ignored,
to write something and not be floored
by many people stopping by
to say “congrats” or “nice try”?

I’ve been elsewhere and I know
that anytime I’m free to go.
But sometimes I just get so mad
that poets just behave so bad!

I’ve tried to win the love of you,
to share my dreams and losses, too.
But most of you refuse to write
a little note, perhaps for spite?

And some of you think you’re so great;
it always seems I’m much too late
to make you happy, feel my joy.
And don’t believe my heart a toy!

By sharing all the things we feel
we get a glimpse, so unreal,
of what each other feels inside,
of all the secrets that we hide.

You might scoff, tell me to go.
But, honey, I’ll just tell you no!
I tire of the lofty airs
when I visit poets’ lairs!

You’ll listen now and listen well,
you’ll hear all I have to tell!
Keep in mind there are a few
who lend a hand a time or two.

I’m grateful to those who have writ
a note, a simple little bit.
It means more than a book in size,
in fact it is the better prize.

So to you who stop and sign
our little messages in rhyme,
or simply say a line or two
I’d like to say that I love you.

To those of you who always spurn
let me remind you of your turn.
If you have nothing at all to say
that’s nice then please just go away.

~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~

Kit McCallum

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1 posted 2001-01-20 08:18 PM

Well, you've expressed yourself well in this piece PoeticEnchantress, and the meter and flow was great. The forums really do move pretty quickly around here. It happens to us all, but we still call it home.

Best wishes,
/Kit

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29

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Victoria Australia

2 posted 2001-01-20 08:18 PM

Poetic Enchantress,
this is not to justify actions for this can never be, but sometimes there are just too many poems and not enough time to read and comment, so good poems and poets get missed and it's not intentional,it's life.
I liked this and did not think it was too much although it was obvious you were miffed!
write on
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.

emmalouise
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since 2000-06-04

Posts 26

3 posted 2001-01-20 08:21 PM

Hi PE...

I liked this one. It was cute, but it really expresses how I feel when I read a REALLY good poem here, and no one responds to it. Thanks to your poem, I have made a vow to try to always comment in some way to a poem that touches me on any level.

Thanks for sharing.

Emma

WinterTalon
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since 2001-01-14

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Brooksville, KY, USA

4 posted 2001-01-20 08:23 PM

hehe, it was fun to write. Is that strange? And I know it happens to everyone. I just wrote it to get out my frustration. Never intended to post it but it was just too funny (from my PoV).

~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2001-01-20 08:39 PM

Poetic,
It's all too true and funny honey.
And with this poem your on the money.
Good writing, good poem, enjoyed. Sy

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

6 posted 2001-01-20 09:05 PM

Excellent flow and theme

Clever and true in some cases! Unfortunately many great poems get passed by because open poetry is very fast paced nowadays. It upsets me, as well, when some poems get 60 replies and other poems, that are just as great that are by unknowns, get only 2. I hope that all of the poets in this forum, gets the chance to read this gem

Take care,
Melissa

The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2001-01-20 10:40 PM

I love this. . . and it's too true. . .
bumping it back up to be readily viewed!!

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Startime
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8 posted 2001-01-20 10:53 PM

*giggling* yep you hit the nail on the head. Well done, dear one. This sure deserves to be read by all. Much love and hugs to you from me.

Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams.
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Saunni
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9 posted 2001-01-20 11:10 PM

I know how you feel....it's awful to write and have no one respond or very few then to see someone else have a million responses. I understood all you expressed and was not offended.

Sauni

Sauni :)
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I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

WinterTalon
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since 2001-01-14

Posts 141
Brooksville, KY, USA

10 posted 2001-01-20 11:40 PM

*laughs* Don't you find it rather unsettling that the poem that got more responses than all my others happened to be one that bashes the Passions forums? How ironic...

And thanks, it sucks when poets with awesome poems rarely get many notes. I make sure that if i'm around and see a poem with few posts, i read that one FIRST and comment. Love ya all!

~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~

lucky
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since 2000-01-17

Posts 1601
Idaho

11 posted 2001-01-21 12:18 PM

Welcome to the club Bubba... I post very few for this same reason so if you see me do take the time and let me know... But I did see you..!

dale

lucky
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since 2000-01-17

Posts 1601
Idaho

12 posted 2001-01-21 12:31 PM

Alright,
What else you got around that' cute... I'll just head over and take a look. Oh by the way Sis... You may think siblings look better than you... But it's your heart and what you write that makes you special. Where'd you get that make up anyway..? Do you watch Star Trek..? This was a very good piece... You just tell me where I can see more.

dale

[This message has been edited by lucky (edited 01-21-2001).]

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21

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In the winds of Cherokee song

13 posted 2001-01-21 12:51 PM

I know that it can be frustrating and I have to admit that I don't get to reply to as many as I would like and only reply to about 1/3 of the ones I read. There are times when I don't have the time to and then of course I am guilty of failing to come up with the proper words. All poets deserve to know how their works are viewed and I know I should make a more consertive effort to spreading my replies around. In other words....I am guilty of falling into a routine roster to reply to but I will make more of an effort to find those that have few replies. Just so you know.......judging by the replies you have on this one, I feel safe in saying that you probably have this many AND MORE reading ALL of your works but many don't reply. So rest assured, no matter how many replies you get on a single post...it is probably being enjoyed by at least double that or more.

[This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 01-21-2001).]

Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16

Posts 2637
Escondido-California

14 posted 2001-01-21 01:38 AM

Hi PoeticEnchantress,

Enjoyed this one very much, and you are not alone in your feelings, I like Mark read alot more poetry than reply to for sure and most of the time its because I can't find the right words either, but you posting this will remind all of us that it has happend to us before and to try and spread out more, personally I loved the read very much did not find it offensive at all, will see you in the furture.

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)

Cerenity
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15 posted 2001-01-21 01:39 AM

Sorry forgot to add to my library,

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)

WinterTalon
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since 2001-01-14

Posts 141
Brooksville, KY, USA

16 posted 2001-01-21 01:48 AM

*smiles and dabs at watery eyes*
Thanks! You all really are a great buncha ppl. Kisses and stuff!

~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~

lucky
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Idaho

17 posted 2001-01-21 02:16 AM

Just a note,

Did you chech critical analysis lately..?

dale
~

WinterTalon
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Posts 141
Brooksville, KY, USA

18 posted 2001-01-21 02:26 AM

Yer so good to me, dale. *Big, cheesy grin* heh, thanx. You've really made a big difference in my day. It wasn't lookin' very good but you managed to save it rather skillfully. Look! I'm actually a MEMBER now. I'm so impressed... *preens*

~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~

serenity blaze
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Posts 27738

19 posted 2001-01-21 02:27 AM

Guilty--as charged. Haven't been reading and replying as much lately...and to all? my humble apologies...and I know, all too well, the need to be acknowledged. may I offer a belated hug? thank you for this reminder.

Mr.Magoo
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since 2001-01-20

Posts 104

20 posted 2001-01-21 02:33 AM

Poet,
Although Im new at posting here,I have been reading for some time.
I have to agree with what you have expressed in your writing....BUT I also think that you too have passed some by without a comment.
We are all guilty of passing over someone at one time or another.
Like others have said above,with so many good poems it`s hard to post a thought on everyone.
Keep up the good work.
Mr.Magoo

WinterTalon
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since 2001-01-14

Posts 141
Brooksville, KY, USA

21 posted 2001-01-21 02:37 AM

*chuckles* I never claimed to be a saint. But i really just joined this week. I'm testing my wings, so to speak. (And I'm rhymin' all over the place, beg pardon) So don't go scoldin' me. If I honestly have nothing to say, I won't. But if i read it and it touches me, speaks to me or yells something obsene, you may be sure that I will reply!

~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

22 posted 2001-01-21 09:59 AM

Sometimes it's very hard to keep up with things here. I myself spend very little time online anymore sue to health problems and other reasons. I drop by passions from time to time to read a few poems and post a poem or two of my own. I find I'm guilty of reading poetry from some of my favorites here that are good friends and I've known for a few years...with such little time, I can't find the strength or willpower to tackle so many others at this point in my life. If that makes me a "snob", then so be it...but I've always encouraged anyone who has a work that they really wish me to see to simply e-mail me a link and I'd be more than happy to read it.
just MHO on this one

~ Ruth
www.angelfire.com/pa/OriginalMinds/index.html

Chanson
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Up Creek w/Out Paddle

23 posted 2001-01-21 10:14 AM

I've felt this way a time or two and I'm willing to bet many others have too. I admire you for saying it.

Maybe this will help....to take on the attitude I have about writing. I write for myself first. Any and all responses to my poems are icing on the cake, that little added bonus not expected but certainly appreciated. (Afterall, if we're posting we do hope it touches someone and they say so

Chin up and write on

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...chanson~

Music, tonal clear & pure,
Caresses the harshest of curves.
---Song of Gesture

[This message has been edited by chansondegeste (edited 01-21-2001).]

David2
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24 posted 2001-01-21 10:19 AM

PoeticEnchantress,
This was a very fun poem to read and I am sure you are merely echoing the sentiments felt by the majority of us at one time or another.
David2

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08

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25 posted 2001-01-21 12:01 PM

I like feats of daring do, and I'm glad you had the courage to post this. I don't find it at all offensive, because I have felt the same frustrations from time to time.
Just keep writing and posting. If a poem you like slips to the back too fast, why not bring it back yourself and say hey, guys , please tell me what you think of this one. Chances are it slipped because of the number of posts. That happens to everyone'
Keep writing
Liz

Bill Charles
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26 posted 2001-01-21 02:16 PM

Hi PoeticEnchantress,

H'mmmm, I must say that you certainly have expressed how you felt that frustrating day when you wrote this. However, I can't agree with all of what you say. I have found that many, many of the poets here, are the greatest people I have had the pleasure of meeting. But I do say, it is very well written.

BC

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

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Spring, Texas

27 posted 2001-01-21 02:38 PM

Sorta copying Mark and Bill here, don't totally agree but in essence do...I know I don't comment on near as many as I read. Some because I don't want to, most because for me to read and comment on a piece takes several minutes to complete with my "computer" and if I commented on all I read, I'd get to read so few. I do agree all probably deserve comment, and I too, often bump ones that seem to have been overlooked, per my likes/dislikes.

Then, too, you have to realize the volume of works on this forum and it's very easy to have a work sent way down the line without being "seen" properly by others...just from the sheer volume of postings, both comments and new ones - more the reason to start reading on page 2 - 3 - 4 - or 5 sometimes.

There is no good or one answer. You have to realize not everyone feels they want to comment on a particular piece, for many reasons, but in general I think Passions Poets do very well and, as is said...stiff upper lip, my friend...keep writing, keep reading; so will the rest of us.

I enjoyed this write, as I have others of yours.

jwesley

p.s. - I came back in to read "all" the comments in here as didn't do that the first time round,
and in response to your last comment,(below - and don't take this as chastising...it's not) I, for one, cannot, will not promise to read all postings whether they have 20 comments or none. And If someone, or all don't want to read my work...that's fine too, I'm not gonna get upset; it was my choice to post, it's theirs whether to read it or not. I, too, like many other's, have had several "slip by" unnoticed, but, hey, that's part of the game.

[This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 01-21-2001).]

JamesMichael
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28 posted 2001-01-21 02:58 PM

It seems you have found a way to get lots of responses...I admit lots of responses make me happy and few responses have me wondering what's it all about...yes I like to be noticed...you have to admit this is a nice place to express feelings and creativity and if we can accept the fact that some write to large audiences and some to small soon happiness will be flowing as a river...James

WinterTalon
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Brooksville, KY, USA

29 posted 2001-01-21 03:16 PM

If you ppl would read my other comments, you'd learn that I KNOW that ppl here are nice and don't mean to bump poems to the bottom without reading or commenting on them. I've also stated that i'm guilty of it myself, but I reply as often as I can. I even go back and bring poems from earlier in the day to the top again. No, I don't believe I deserve a medal or anything for it, but guys, if u see a poem that has so few replies, comment or at least read and see if u want to. I have a poem on here that didn't get a single response. At all. And, while I DO write for myself, to see that no one even READ it that was brave enough to comment is rather discouraging...

~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~

nona
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30 posted 2001-01-21 04:18 PM

me thinks you hit a nail or two square on the head...I have been quilty of not always responding also and have had a few of my poems get lost like IF ONLY the first time around. Then I reposted it and got some very positive feedback. Enjoyed the read it was well written.... nona

WinterTalon
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Posts 141
Brooksville, KY, USA

31 posted 2001-01-21 05:21 PM

Thank you all for all this feedback. I still think it's sad that of all the poems i've posted (not that many really), this one has the most replies. Hrm... Perhaps I should write more like this...

Thanks, again.

~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~

Iwritethepoems
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since 2001-01-21

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32 posted 2001-01-21 07:28 PM

I think it's pretty sad too

WinterTalon
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Brooksville, KY, USA

33 posted 2001-01-21 07:38 PM

After all the negative remarks (ok, so there weren't that many...) I've decided to write a sequel. Wonder if it'll get read or ignored.

Should be fun to find out, tho.

~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~

Ladycat

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34 posted 2001-01-21 07:58 PM

HAHAHAHAHAHA!!!
That is about all that I can say. This was funny. I can't take offense to this. I think that this is wonderful and at times I have felt the same way too, but there was no way that I could have put it the way that you did. I would have just seemed rude. PE, don't change a bit. I think that we all got a little laugh from this piece.

Love,
Lady

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dgvarner
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35 posted 2001-01-21 09:26 PM

i've found....that a really good title helps

but, i know..some of mine fall thru with only a few responses also..open moves very fast..sometimes too fast..there are a lot of very talented people here..you could try another forum if you want it to move slower..the pub or dark, i've found move quite slow..but in time people do respond..

just a thought...

good poem to sift your soul

hugs, g

"i was thinkin'
if you were lonely
maybe we could leave here
and no one would know
at least not to where we would think so..."

Rosebud1229
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36 posted 2001-01-21 11:13 PM

I loved this, It is precise thought quite nice in every aspect in the same way, there are times I to don't know what response to say other times I tend to babble to much, but THIS is really great work.

wayoutwalt
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37 posted 2001-01-21 11:35 PM

i love this high fives handstands and cartwheels i love this so nicely said woohoo keep it up o yuh sequel hehe

WinterTalon
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since 2001-01-14

Posts 141
Brooksville, KY, USA

38 posted 2001-01-21 11:53 PM

Aww...

You're so sweet...

~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~

kaile

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39 posted 2001-01-26 09:15 PM

hi there,

i read this and am off to read your sequel...

above all, dont get discouraged by the miserable amount of replies you get to some of your posts...write for yourself if nothing else and rest assured that i will add a reply to yours whenever i have something constructive to say...

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