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snowpants
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0 posted 2000-12-02 07:06 PM


I’m lonely tonight, darling--
Won’t you come and take me away?
This heart sits in silence--
Won’t you sing me
That beautiful melody of yours?
There really aren’t many words
That can reach me tonight,
Except for those select few
You whispered into my ear
That night.
There’s no flow
Without you here;
Nothing can pass the time
When you’re gone.
Won’t see a smile;
Won’t feel any joy
Until you show me the stars once again.
I guess there’s only one solution--
One answer to this tragic longing--
Your arms around me;
Your heart beating
Here next to me.


'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me...

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Tony Abbot
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1 posted 2000-12-02 07:08 PM


Lovely poem,full of longing and desire.

'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot

Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2000-12-02 10:46 PM


SnowPants~
Such lovingly longing thoughts -

'I guess there’s only one solution--
One answer to this tragic longing--
Your arms around me;
Your heart beating
Here next to me.'


I was reminded of that lovely classic by Karen Carpenter 'Close To You'.
Enjoyed this render.
~*Marge*~


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Victoria
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3 posted 2000-12-02 11:08 PM


it is torturous wanting to be with someone who you love...enjoyed snowpants..

              ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Lone Wolf
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4 posted 2000-12-02 11:21 PM


sp,

Very well written here.  The pain and longing reach right out and pull you in.  Hang in there.  Happiness will find you my friend.  

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

snowpants
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5 posted 2000-12-03 10:47 AM


Tony:  thanks!  glad you liked it!  

Marge:  you're right!  I didn't even think of that one.  well, thank you for stopping by for a read!  

Victoria:  yes, yes, it is.  especially on these cold December nights!  thanks!  

LW:  thanks!  I appreciate your warm words!  

sp


'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me...

Mark Bohannan
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6 posted 2000-12-03 01:48 PM


Sounds like the perfect solution to me my friend.  Your writing is growing with each and every post and you came in a shining star so you now know of the level you are at.  Superbly written and one for my library for sure.  Loved it.  (Can't wait for the season to start again so that I can finally get the poem for me "CARDINALS" written by you. )

A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses.
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snowpants
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KS
7 posted 2000-12-03 03:31 PM


Yes, my friend, that seems to be the only one I could come up with.  Thank you for your kind words.  I am honored to be praised by a fine poet such as yourself.
And, about that Cardinals poem, don't hold your breath...

sp  


'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me...

Aimster
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Charlotte, NC
8 posted 2000-12-03 08:08 PM


Kris--

BEAUTIFUL!!!! Loved this, I did. Even
though it was sad, still amazing and
full of that huge heart of yours. got
a big smile on my face now thanks to you
take care.
~~~~~~~
~a~

Tara Simms
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Honea Path, SC USA
9 posted 2000-12-03 09:23 PM


This is lovely.  I can feel the yearning from here.  
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