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A Crack In The Song
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A Crack In The Song |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas 
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A Crack In The Song Soft ly fall ing Down, D o w n beyond the b o t t o m further, further, my heart, my soul, my life, has reached the end. There's a crack in the song, a warp in the wheel, my head spins round, round, and d o w n down, f a l l I n g on my back looking up; sky dark, empty, nothing left... noth... ing left. Since you. w. james beard, jr. ...I dunno, this is the way it looked when I opened my eyes! [This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 11-19-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very creative! You've described it perfectly, too! Denise |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
James--I loved this...the form, the meaning...all...well done! |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
 Such a thin line... between having it all and loosing it all, kinda like the line between the sky and the earth. Bob <>< |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
JW* Wow....exactly! The format added so much to the feel of this poem but the words alone would have made for a powerful statement...Excellent writing and thought was put into this piece as always!! You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Thanks Denise, Martie, Bob, and BDC, really glad you like the format. As a lot of us have...seem me in that position several times. jwesley |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
this d r o p p e d into my heart... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
very cool. nicely done woohoo |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
this was a sheer pleasure to read...thanx for showing me sonething unique and i will try to incorporate such format into my writing now... thanx for the read  [This message has been edited by kaile (edited 12-07-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JWesley~ I really enjoyed this. The presentation added to the impact of your thoughts. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
poetically wonderful, artistically superb. I've never been able to do cool stuff like this, it's puts a great spin on poetry  With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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