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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
This season of cool rains with grey winter fading and spring waiting anxiously on the doorstep, I think of you. I remember the dense shade of sheltering oak trees in the park where we laid out picnics long ago. How we wrestled with love among the tall wet grasses, teasing each other into easy submission. You must have known even then how much I wanted you! Young we were, and green as grass but full of new grown desire. You claimed me with your gentle touch, your tenderness made me tremble. You were no poet, yet your eyes smiled sonnets in the summer sun, dropped them like kisses everywhere your loving gaze fell on my face, my arms, my belly... I keep them still, each one cherished in myheart. But we grew up, and grew apart as summer stumbled into fall. We each found a different path and though I longed for you to hold me close, bid me stay, you just turned and walked away. Season followed after season down all the years until today. Our paths have crossed and crossed again, sometimes we stop to talk and touch, sometimes we just move past. But each time I have yearned for more, to hold you close and not let go, to walk the path together. And this season of cold rains, when memories are my only warmth, I cannot help but think of you. I think of you, and smile. [This message has been edited by Beki (edited 11-18-2000).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Beki, I can sooo relate to this. You describe a failed relationship perfectly. Write on Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
It's the warmest of smiles - from the inside - I can relate for sure. Nice one, Beki..  |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Thank you kethry, though I don't know if I'd call it a failed relationship so much as a lost one. We are still in touch through email though time and circumstances have kept us apart for over 20 years  I emailed him this poem a couple days ago and he loved it.Nan, thanks, and hello...have been posting here again for a few weeks but my posts get buried so fast, this is first I have seen you comment this go 'round, glad you caught this one! Hope all is well with you [This message has been edited by Beki (edited 11-18-2000).] |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
shameless bumping here LOL |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
This was evocative and exquisitely written,with some lovely imagery.Enjoyed mucho. |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Thank you Tony, I am glad you enjoyed it |
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Lloyd Junior Member
since 1999-06-16
Posts 17Torquay, Vic. Australia |
I'll bump it up again for you, Beki. This deserves to be read by as many as possible. It evokes feeling !! I really enjoyed the read. |
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DreamSeeker Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 72 |
To Walk The Past Together Longing For that Prize To Speak The Heart Words Unsaid Once More Just Once more To Live Within Your Eyes |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Thank you bunches, Lloyd Dreamseeker, I like the verse you shared..is it from a song? |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful!!  |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Wow... I know these feelings well... excellent writing... -Tier |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Thank you very much divine and tier, I am so glad you enjoyed my poem, and that it touched a familiar place in your heart |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
only a half dozen people have read this poem so I am bumpin it up once more.... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Some people are unforgettable... so are your poems. *S* This is great! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I think he left a treasure behind and he doesn't even know it....well I sure like the way you did this one up and hooked me real good!! |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Thank you so much Suthern (been awhile, nice to se eyou!) and Etome, for your generous comments. I apprecitae your reading and responding. |
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