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Paula Finn
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0 posted 2000-11-16 02:05 PM


Now that I know the difference I offer both

Distant Miles

Across distant miles
Two hearts two minds lives entwined
Can we ever be

Winter Whispers

Winter winds whisper
Snow in ever growing drifts
Cherry blossoms bloom



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kaile
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1 posted 2000-11-16 05:59 PM


and both are very nice!!!

liked the way you gave the reader an open-ended ending in your senryu

ethome
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2 posted 2000-11-16 06:01 PM


Very nice I commend you for using the style and doing something with it...good work!!
vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...
3 posted 2000-11-16 06:07 PM



Paula-
   these are both wonderfully done.  
   i really enjoyed reading them.  
   i must warn you though...this
   style can become very addicting...lol.
  
   hugs,
   -vicky




"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



peppermint35
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4 posted 2000-11-17 03:33 AM


Certainly addicting to the reader too

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
Percy Bysshe Shelley

Paula Finn
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5 posted 2000-11-18 01:14 AM


kaile...thank you...this is new to me and I am not real sure if Im doing it right...but its fun

ethome...thank you my friend...its fun trying new things

vlraynes...well its not the style I usually write in but its ben fun

Pepper...thank you...what a great compliment

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