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I Dance The Twinkling....
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I Dance The Twinkling.... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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silver glove of velvet touch a lady ~ fair ~ a gaze of pond a single taper lessens dark a crescent moon.....a hint of blush. spears of aloe beg to heal horn of plenty......bowl of salt seductive ~ fog ~ a blanket dream fruits of harvest...fruit, surreal... four o clocks in waft perfume a breeze inspired shimmies leaves a water's trickle, giggling, hibiscus--proud, enough to bloom. Papaya plays in silhouette (I feel the ground beneath my feet.) I raise my arms in claim of sky. In awe, I dance the twinkling... |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I loved it up to the end--- wanted to keep reading but ....--- you cut me short..  Beautiful poemJamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Tripping the blue fandango Across a midnight sky Play your castanets, girl as you traipse on by 'I raise my arms in claim of sky. In awe, I dance the twinkling...' This is a delight. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ok..I read this...and in my mind, I saw a brick courtyard with lots of white twinkling lights and a woman in a long flowing white gown dancing barefoot.... twas a lovely poem!  |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Serenity- wonderful, my friend. this is just such a cheery read. i love it. hugs, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
four o clocks in waft perfume a breeze inspired shimmies leaves a water's trickle, giggling, hibiscus--proud, enough to bloom. Sounds like my garden...I will look for the dancing maiden. Your poem is wonderful, enjoyed it, and was wanting more. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
ooom pretty is all i know to say tho i feel much more yuh |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
silver glove of velvet touch a lady ~ fair ~ a gaze of pond a single taper lessens dark a crescent moon.....a hint of blush. spears of aloe beg to heal horn of plenty......bowl of salt seductive ~ fog ~ a blanket dream fruits of harvest...fruit, surreal... ================== I raise my arms in claim of sky. In awe, I dance the twinkling... ================= and you dance divinely me sweet... me goddess of the night me can see you there in the Mardi Gras Mist... under the southern night sky ... dancing beneath the vine covered Locust trees me sweet little cajun swamp enchantress  what a way cool poem... way cool poet too... kisskiss me |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Ok....now I know who that was out there in my yard dancing last night!! !! serenity, this is a sparkling poem, and was a pleasure to read.......wonderful! Follow your dream! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You guys are FAST...what is that? DSL? M'gosh...don't know how to thank you...you are all so special, and you've brightened my twinkling night. smooches and shmooz....love you all. thank you |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Your imagery is perfection. This is my favorite line, I actually grow these: "four o clocks in waft perfume" "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Serenity, perfect image, perfect timing. it left me wanting more. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Serenity~ Oh girl, you know I read the title and I came running and I was not dissapointed my friend This is so beautiful and just captivating...well penned honLove Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
OOOOOooooo S'en...this is gorgeous! Your imagery and flow are like no other!! All this from the garden of inspiration??? I want to LIVE in your garden!!! Waaaaaaaaah! Loved it girlie!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I thank you ladies much---yer all lovely t'me...and I wish you could be here with me, it's beautiful, yanno....life is good. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Boy, serenity, these words just flow together so well to create such a smooth delivery and the title is terrific! Can I be there, too? |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
..your poetry is so unique and I love reading your work. I read a lady, working, coming home & at nightfall, outside under the Heavens dancing the 'twinkling'. Liked this lots. Marcy |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
The only two things better than this title are of course the beautiful verse (and I love this style from you btw) and of course the light of sheer delight from the poet herself. Beautiful my friend. I really enjoyed watching you do your little dance with such a lovely smile written on your face. |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Keep on dancing then, cause there's magic in your dance that has been translated here by your pen Pepper "I honor the place in you, that when you are in that place, and I am in that place in me, we are in the same place" Ram Dass |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Balladeer, yer always welcome...I assumed you knew that...love ya much Marcy, and Pepper, I thank you so much...Big Hugs'un to ya... life is good. and me angelheart---smile. I promised to be a good girl t'nite...and lucky you, thought I'd start here..lol...winks lovie |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I can see it now. . . Dance woman. . .dance. . . Excellent. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
love the rhythm..and of course your lovely words Serenity.. enjoyed~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
sorry guys...just wanted to say a sincere thank you to Sven, m'friend...joy is there, if we let it, is it not? and Victoria...thank you so much for reading...I do appreciate it so very much! Hugs to the forum, once again. You are all awesome... |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Captivating is the right word I think, I just keep comming back to this one.!< !signature--> "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. [This message has been edited by EagleOne (edited 11-05-2000).] |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Serenity--You have captured such a lovely scene with you imagery that I can see it...wonderful and uplifting poem! |
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shadow of poetry Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 76midwest usa |
hi twin sen im at sis's house for the day, i took over her computer, shes already is in withdrawls haha so you know i had to pop in and find me a serenity poem and this one is cool cool cool what a vision you painted in my head with this. makes me want to go to my favorite spot down by the creek. beautiful poetry, someday when i grow up, i hope to write poetry like this (smile) sis says to tell ya i should write you a poem about chickens hey chickens are cool too haha see you when i see you lil sis my sister is the poet I am but a shadow. by the light of poetry I read then dream |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Eagle---what a nice surprise to see ya here, I thank you so much, I do really appreciate it... Martie--oh...you always do warm my heart. My gratitude is yours. Lil Sis!!! Joyous Hugs to you!!! When Janet told me about the chickens, I could just see it, and it's still good for a smile every time I think of it. Thank you so much for being such a delight, love to you, lil sis!!! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
indeed it is my friend. . . so. . . let there be joy. . . and mirth. . . and music!!! ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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