Open Poetry #10 |
I think fondly, my first love (Gordon Lightfoot's fault everybody) |
wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Looking back some twenty years I think fondly, my first love She hung the sky for me We were young and in control We thought we’d always be Through seasons brings anew I remember holding hands And feeling born alive Kiss me and then goodbye Tomorrow comes she is there She held her hand for me I shook it, said goodnight She was feeling sad for me She left one autumn eve We were holding tight It rained some time back then Forecasted in my life I had no time to cry In the street I was all wet To her name no reply Quiet was the world I saw her by a shady bar She called her husband out Five years passed us by I didn’t mean to find her there Now both of us, we had to cry Neither could embrace Still, I touched her on the cheek She placed her hands on mine Vows shared in that look We can never be apart Soul mates can’t always be Her husband never came I look above, the sun is full The sky is hung for me We hold hands in love What makes it last so long When seemed not meant to be Hands holding us in love We will always be. Seasons bring anew. My wife, I whisper in your ear Forever I love you... [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 10-12-2000).] |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Oh Walt, you have melted me with this....... -SEA |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Beautiful, Walt. Simply beautiful! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Walty, this is beautiful, you've got some terrific lines like.... she hung the sky for me quiet was the world I saw her by a shady bar very nice indeedy Walty "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx guys yuh yuh |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is beautiful, Walt... Well done! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Lovely indeed - You're really very versatile, walt - My hat's off to ya.. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
WOW* Thank goodness for Gordon...he inspired a lovely little weave in you Beeeeuuuuuttteeeeeful~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice Walt....James |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Enjoyable reading, Walt. A pleasant conclusion to a passionate tale. Robert Joseph |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
WOW thankyou yuh |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Loved it Walt.. A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
Ouch. . . .it broke my heart. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Ha yes, Gordy's Gold....another little gem from you indeed. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
You really don't want me to say it do you? I didn't think so! hehehe Walt you've melted hearts here! This is fantastic, romantic, and OH so touching!! It came out just beautifully, and showing the tender heart you have, not to mention the love. I agree with Nan, you are very versatile in what you write. That's a great gift to have. My hat goes off to you as I bow! <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx ya'll hey elisa love....and thanky much white dove |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
WOW...wow... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Very fine indeed Walt...(though I always blame Bob Seger) Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
This poem is very deeply touching. Thank you for sharing! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
big smiles thank you sunshine for briniging this back up top |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ You sentimental sweetheart you ! This is so soft and tender - showcasing the versatility of your talent. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
Pretty cool! got more to say, but, you know... talkachalader |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Ooh, another romantic one from you, walt! Love it!! sp I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanky cruz for poppin this up from the depths and the rest of yuh for bein so kind to the mood i was in yuh |
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