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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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he of uncanny ability to take apart the bricks to see a vision in a memory I never knew he thought it was me so I got lost in poetic time of metered structure and common rhyme fluctuated between then and there now and when and even here but he continued to take apart the bricks blew them over as if they were sticks but was never the wolf at the door in his way he circumcised the structured format of our lives and left it open, flat now and then I look upon the things that were done and now long gone and wonder that he of uncanny ability could take apart the bricks to see a vision in a memory I never knew he thought it was me < !signature--> Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 10-19-2000).] |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
You know, I felt so sad to read this. I hope that's how it was supposed to be, but even if it wasn't, you still evoked a really strong emotion in me. Elizabeth Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near... hedeservesbetter@hotmail.com |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
There are those that can see beyond the wall. . . would that we all could. . . Wonderful my friend. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Karilea, this is fabulous, it's such an insightful thing to write. Which is of course why you can and I can't, it's that I lack any insight at all. Hey ho! well I suppose it's the differences that make us who we are. So I'll be grateful, maybe not very gracious, but gratful at least. So you just hurry over here with that magic dust. Then I'll be really flying. Oh and this is absolutely ace  Take care Marsha  |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
ooee! this evoked emotions for sure. liked the analogy of tearing apart the bricks... hope all is well, Very good writing, enjoyed.  Marcy |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Elizabeth, always share what feelings are elicited when you read someone's work...that tells them if they have done it right...and I appreciate your comments, thank you! Thank you, Sven... Marsha, you mean the pixie hasn't landed yet with that special dust? LOL...thank you! Marcy, when you come in to read, the whole world is right! Thank you! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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