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emily Member
since 2000-10-03
Posts 142USA |
I wander in, again this night to a room I’ve kept through time and hear the screams of what I write and wonder if they shine, for once I found a man so strong yet, fate would have it end and in my mortal bones, I long to know his love again. He’s only now, a memory once magic, now to dust, to gather through eternity, forget him, now, I must. He held me close to where the child lived and once again We only caught a glimpse and smiled, of how it was back then. The innocence and trust we shared, was free and touched me once but when he left I was not spared the ache of loneliness But still, he lives along the edge of my heart in aging prose for one sad day, I made a pledge to leave him, safe, alone. [This message has been edited by emily (edited 10-17-2000).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
...heart in aging prose this has gotta lotta meat in it i loves it |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Emily, a wonderful write you share with us filled with tenderness of heart... Thanks for a great read  Coco |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Emily~ 'But still, he lives along the edge of my heart in aging prose for one sad day, I made a pledge to leave him, safe, alone.' Wow ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and hear the screams of what I write and wonder if they shine, for once I found a man so strong yet, fate would have it end and in my mortal bones, I long to know his love again. He’s only now, a memory once magic, now to dust, to gather through eternity, forget him, now, I must. ===================== trust me poet ... your words... they shine this is a very very well expressed poem... and your rhyme and cadence are perfect... the emotions take me there... I relate to this one very much ... very well written Emily .. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
emily- wow...your words certainly do shine here. wonderful write. this needs to go back to the top so more people may enjoy it. -vicky < !signature--> "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 10-18-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Such obvious honesty and maturity is felt here. Emily, this is such an open refreshing verse, thank you. ~ Beth |
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emily Member
since 2000-10-03
Posts 142USA |
wayout - thank you, I love something to chew on! Coco - thank you for the reply, I loved writing this one. Marge - your replies are appreciated and colorful! Janet Marie - thank you for calling me "poet" Vicky - That was real nice of you! Elizabeth - thank you, I try to be grown-up, it's hard!!!!!!! Emily |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Your words not only shine but they cause the reader to dig deeper and search the feeling behind them. Well written and I am putting you on my must read list. |
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