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Lover's Bliss .......Part 1 of 3
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Lover's Bliss .......Part 1 of 3 |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! 
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I feel your hand touch my face It sends shivers down my spine How long I've waited for this moment When I would finally make you mine My body aches for your embrace For your tender loving touch In all my life I've never found Anything I've wanted so much To see the love there in your eyes Was worth the time it took I quickly became paralyzed With just a passing look Your gentle gaze enslaved my soul My heart is yours to hold Every sigh I hear you cry Reveals a story yet untold TO BE CONTINUED......... |
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LoveBug
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
As the resident LoveBug, I rate this love poem (on a scale of 1-10)... 1000000000000000000000000000000000000!!! This is such a sweet piece, my friend. I can't wait to see parts 2 and three!  False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the diffrence. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Thank you Lovebug......guess nobody else liked it |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
nicely written. enjoyed. |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
~*SIGH*~ Oh my, my heart is melting. This is beautiful, both the poem and what's behind it. She must be a very lucky girl. Very well said Jeffrey, I'm looking forward to hte rest. ~Sheri |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is just beautiful Now waiting for part three Liz |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Soft, gentle, romantic and lovely...someone must be in Love...James |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Jeffrey, sometimes these slippery little suckers get by without me reading them. But I'm glad this delightful piece came back so I could read it. Now all I have to do is find parts two and three. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
jeff~ your writing is simply beautiful friend. just in the short time i have known you...i have watched you grow as a poet by leaps and bounds. beautiful work! now where's part two??? take care. amy "The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences" |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jeff...you are SUCH a TEASE...part one? cmon GIVE...this is wonderful |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Jeffrey, Have to admit, I read part two first . . . but this is wonderful writing. So romantic and full of longing. Great job my friend. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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