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Lightning (villenelle) (Mark Challange)
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Lightning (villenelle) (Mark Challange) |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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Thundering, crackling flashing in the silent night Her presence I felt, heard, sought, wanted to be She visited, my senses she held on real tight -------- Her teasing eyes, her lilting laugh delightful in my sight Bringing back sweet memories of days I used to see Thundering, crackling flashing in the silent night ----- I looked for her, elusive her as she hid from the light She knew my thoughts, slipped my grasp you see She visited, my senses she held on real tight -------- Floating on the air was, like lightning in the night. As single entities we've blended poetry so free Thundering, crackling flashing in the silent night ----------- Weary though she may be and she knows her plight. A pleasure she remains to me, she's all she needs to be. She visits, my senses she holds on real tight. -------- So far the distance is between us, yet she's within my sight. To never to have known her, t'would be sad mystery. Thundering, Crackling, flashing in the silent night. --- She has her wings she's free to fly, onward through the night. But she seeks shelter too, a haven from the sea. She visits, my senses she holds on real tight. --- I'll bend my every effort; I'll fight the final fight. To aid her in her distress if she makes a call to me. She visits, my senses she holds on real tight. Thundering, crackling flashing in the silent night. ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
/pip/Forum42/HTML/000015.html EXCELLENT!!! You have shined amidst the storm on this challenge. I feel the need for many more storms from you. Lovely in shape, form, content, and flow. |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Oh Wilfred, I absolutely adore this piece. And the format makes it even better! GREAT job  Going into my library....... ~Sheri |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wow!! Bill, you have ziz zagged quite a storm here...great job...Love it! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Wilfred~ Zapped me ! Wonderful display of your talent. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Mark- Scratching around to find a subject - allowing a shape with words - was far from easy - Thank you  Sheri- My humble thanks ~S~ Martie- Running down field with the ball - one has to know when to zig and when to zag Thank youI don't know which was tougher - the villenelle - or the jagged streaks - Thank you ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Bill, you made both of them look easy. A man who puts this much effort in his work receives my utmost respect.....it's yours. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wil this was electric, both the display and the form was breath-taking. I love storms, they remind me of this  Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Wil, OOOOoooooOOooo.. I like I like  rp25 |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
'deer - hang the respect - show me the money (jes kidding) Sincerely - thank you Kethry- Well I'm no wizard - but I love thunderstorms with lightning - Think they're sexy ~WG~ Thank you rp25-  Thank you ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
You wowed me with your talents on this piece, Impressed me with your creativity, and electrified me with your lightening charged phrases. This is my favorite of yours, though there are many that come close. Great talent here Liz |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It's a little complicated, Mr. Yeats, bowing and clapping at the same time... but I have to admit, I see much in the verbiage, you just added a punch with the graphics... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Liz & Karilea- When two of my Fav PF poets offer me kudos - I am floating on cloud nine! Thank you both so very much! ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
This is great! I love lightening too! Beautiful write. |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
May lightening strike me down for not seeing this poem sooner. Your presentation and poem are both enlightening ...chanson~ Music, tonal clear & pure, Caresses the harshest of curves. -Song of Gesture |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
insect - humble thanks to the Rainbow creator - that is a masterpiece! Chanson- did I detect a bit of punnery? ~S~ thanks - I love it |
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