Untitled.. inspired by Severn's Challenge

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Open Poetry #7

Untitled.. inspired by Severn's Challenge

angelsamongus
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since 2000-05-27

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0 posted 2000-05-29 08:27 AM

Life's loves and losses tangled at her feet,
she takes three steps and falls back two.
She is less then poetry in motion
but she gets up, brushes off and stumbles through.

When her going seemed so useless;
she blindly walked her path,
Making more mistakes then victories,
often swallowing life's wrath.

Known for her many mistakes,
and cursed for them too.
She trudges on and on,
Smiling at her victories... a few
(she is "I")
5/29/00

[This message has been edited by angelsamongus (edited 05-29-2000).]

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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1 posted 2000-05-29 09:06 AM

Lori~
Just perfect I think.
We must all learn to celebrate the victories, no matter how small we perceive them to be ... they add up !
The Challenge Forum is great for stirring the creative juices.
You more than met the challenge.
Nicely done.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

angelsamongus
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since 2000-05-27

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2 posted 2000-05-29 09:52 AM

~Thanks Marge~ Your words mean alot!
~BLESSINGS~
Lori

Poet deVine

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3 posted 2000-05-29 09:46 PM

Challenge met!! I like this poem.

Severn
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since 1999-07-17

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4 posted 2000-05-30 12:53 PM

Angels - this is wonderful!

Known for her many mistakes,
and cursed for them too.
She trudges on and on,
Smiling at her victories... a few

I can really identify with this, and you may count your poem as one of your victories...

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

5 posted 2000-05-30 05:14 AM

This is Wonderful Angels, A challenge well met. Enjoyed the read.

Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)

angelsamongus
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since 2000-05-27

Posts 70
New York

6 posted 2000-05-30 07:48 PM

~Poet de Vine~
Glad you liked it!
~Severn~
Thanks so much.. Glad you liked it.
~Dark Angel~
Happy you enjoyed it.

Lori

Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30

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7 posted 2000-05-30 10:17 PM

I guess we all make mistakes and learn by them ... But I like the victories best

Rex

angelsamongus
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since 2000-05-27

Posts 70
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8 posted 2000-05-31 03:05 PM

Thank You Rex
~Lori~

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