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kat
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0 posted 05-28-2000 11:14 AM       View Profile for kat   Email kat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for kat

It’s You                            

I don’t need a mansion
A big bank account
Latest fashion
I don’t need a fancy car
Diamond rings
Big party action
All I need is you

It’s you

Anyplace is home to me
A few dollars is all we need
My clothes are comfortable
The car is up to speed
My fingers, I prefer them bare
We can make a party of our own
I’m in love with you

It’s you

Fix this house, will you!
Where’s the money you earned last week
My clothes are getting way too tight
By the way, the gas tank has a leak
You should see the ring on my friend’s finger
Wow! And what a social life she has
You wanted kids, didn’t you?
Ugh!

It’s you

I’ll take the house, you’ll see
Oh, the alimony you will pay
It’s only labels that I’ll wear
And the car, well, that can stay
Here’s my wedding band, you cheap
I need to live it up
I can’t believe I stayed with such a creep
Because of you and only you
We’re through

It’s you


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Kit McCallum
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1 posted 05-28-2000 11:36 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Wow ... quite a twist Kat!  Powerful reading, much enjoyed ...

Best wishes,
/Kit
kat
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2 posted 05-28-2000 12:09 PM       View Profile for kat   Email kat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kat

Thanks Kit, I'm glad you found it powerful, and enjoyed it.  

Kat
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3 posted 05-28-2000 02:59 PM       View Profile for insect   Email insect   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for insect

CREEP

Don't bother waiting up
That food is still in the cup
Gas is up every week
I have to fix the leek

What? Your fingers are bare!
Did you have to shave off the hair
I like your clothes real tight
They make your buns a delight

Sure we can party and dance
I love to party in your pants
I'm in love with you too
I have to confess it's true

Her ring was given by me
She may be the one to be
When I said I was in love with you too!
I should have explained TWO!!

Please don't blow your lid
I know you'll take care of the kids
I don't think we can pay for the cable
But your friend looks good in that label

My cheque is not very far
I've invested it into the bar
I guess my bed is the car
You can have the change in the jar

You’re a dead end road to steep!
"It's you" Ok I'm a creep!
But there was a time we knew
When all I could love was you

Forgive me for my leap
You've pounded my head with "CREEP"

It's just a poem, insect friend LOL
Mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm


[This message has been edited by insect (edited 05-28-2000).]
kat
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4 posted 05-28-2000 03:46 PM       View Profile for kat   Email kat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kat

Well I have news for you to hear
About my friend who has your ring
She's been hanging around me dear
And she calls me her darling

I knew you had a thing for two
That's all fine and maybe so
But what you didn't know, and this is true
With a man she would not go

She was a man about a year ago
And yes, her clothes fit very nice
But her manhood didn't all go
So I suggest you grab some ice

As far as your paycheck at the bar
Well it figures, I should have know
That's why your bed is in the car
And your aroma, well, it's got to go

Oh, I'll have more then enough things you'll see
Take care of the kids and so much more
You're uncle's inheritance was left to me
You signed it over, you're out the door

A drunken fool you were that night
Not realizing what you were signing
You gave it all up and without a fight
I can't believe it, I'm still laughing

hehehe


kat

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5 posted 05-28-2000 08:52 PM       View Profile for kat   Email kat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kat

Insect, your response was really funny I enjoyed it immensely...lol.

This poem is about how two people fall in love and then how in some cases what they see at the beginning in someone they can no longer see years later.  How they start getting bitter along the way and in the end, end up trying to ruin eachother. In this case the woman no longer loves the man for just being him and nothing more.  Life's hardships take over and she craves  more and more things to satisfy her as she sees others having more.
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6 posted 05-28-2000 10:25 PM       View Profile for insect   Email insect   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for insect

The joke is really on me
When I said she may be the one to be
I didn't finish my sentence
I thought our love was a life sentence

She may be the one to be our maid of honor
So I met her down at the corner
To secretly hold your ring
Are you and her a thing

I didn’t want to tell you when
I was going to marry you again
Like the food that landed in the cup
When you talk you just don't shut up

All the little fights with us
Is a ride on the marriage bus
Before you say any more
And kick me out the door

I did some serious thinking
I'll try to stop my drinking
I'm asking on my knee
Will you marry me

Hi kat
Thought I'd give it a good ending
Some people remarry

Sad what happens to people
I don't mean to make fun of them
It's just poetry
Had a good laugh from yours too!
I ate a Kit-kat today
Mmmmmmmmmmmm!!


kat
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7 posted 05-29-2000 12:19 AM       View Profile for kat   Email kat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kat

Mmmmmmmmmm Kit-Kat, I love those.
Insect, you can laugh at anything you want, it's just poetry nothing more, I'm here to have fun with it and you're doing a great job in making it fun.
By the way, what a come back!  That was great, I loved it and had a good laugh also.
Thanks!  

Kat
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8 posted 05-29-2000 12:45 AM       View Profile for Alina Le Ann   Email Alina Le Ann   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Alina Le Ann's Home Page   View IP for Alina Le Ann

The ORIGINAL poem on this page is very nice. It gets a simple point across and in a heart-felt way. I like it. As for the other poems on here....well what a laugh!!! ha ha ha
this was absolutely the best page I could have chosen to read. Very well written....to the both of you  


Alina Le Ann
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9 posted 05-29-2000 01:05 AM       View Profile for kat   Email kat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kat

Thanks Alina for that compliment. It's greatly appreciated and as far as the rest, well I just love having fun. I'm glad you enjoyed it.  

Kat
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10 posted 05-30-2000 12:03 AM       View Profile for insect   Email insect   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for insect

Thanks Alina for that compliment. It's greatly appreciated and as far as the rest, well I just love having fun. I'm glad you enjoyed it.     

insect
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11 posted 05-30-2000 01:19 PM       View Profile for Poertree   Email Poertree   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poertree

Great poem kat ... almost transported me to Elysium ....

but seriously this was funny !...  

Philip

"beauty is nectar, and nectar in the desert saves ..."
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12 posted 05-30-2000 01:48 PM       View Profile for CocoBaci   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CocoBaci

A very touching yet powerful poem!
Coco
kat
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13 posted 05-31-2000 12:12 AM       View Profile for kat   Email kat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kat

Oh Insect
The games you play here day by day
They make me laugh, that I must say
You choose your words so carefully
Wait a minute! Weren't they chosen by me

Your response to Alina that was nice
You knew about my defeciancy
I don't understand till I read things twice

So I thank-you there for lending me a hand
Writing it twice really helped me understand
LOL  


Philip, thanks! Well the original poem was intended to be a certain way but I had fun adding to insect's response with the other one. I'm glad you liked it.  


Coco, thanks!

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14 posted 05-31-2000 02:26 AM       View Profile for insect   Email insect   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for insect

Mmmmmmmmmmm!!
Oh kat
When you say THE GAME's you play
I play them day by day but here today,
did you play my GAME, THE GAME.
You know THE name, called THE GAME
I must say I want your laugh to laugh today

Wait a minute, they weren't chosen by me
My response was your response, Alina was nice
And she laughed not just because of me
And she laughed not just because of me

So you thank me from there taking my hand
I'm writing it twice so you have the upperstand
I understand
LOL

Next time I'm on top.  he! he!
Mmmmmmmmmmm!!

This has been lots of fun and it's not because of me!
                       IT'S YOU


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15 posted 05-31-2000 05:52 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Kat~
Wow...loved this and what a turn around, very good  
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


kat
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16 posted 05-31-2000 08:19 AM       View Profile for kat   Email kat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kat

Insect,  
I haven't played the GAME yet, but I'll make sure to do so.
I agree, this was alot of fun. Thanks!  


Tracie, thanks! Sometimes in life we think things are going one way and we find out later that they have turned in a direction we never even thought possible.  

Kat

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17 posted 05-31-2000 08:24 AM       View Profile for lorilockheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lorilockheart

Kat, this has made my morning, and gotten me laughing.  I enjoyed your original poem, but I also got a kick out of everything else.  Maybe you two should try teaming up for a poem together.

Lori

 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance.
song by LeeAnn Womack
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
kat
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18 posted 05-31-2000 09:29 AM       View Profile for kat   Email kat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kat

Lori, I'm glad this has made your morning. It had me laughing also. Just reading the responses and answering to them was a blast.  Hmmm Insect and I getting together to write a poem? It sounds like alot of fun but the only way I can see it happening is when it happens like this.  It's up to insect but writing spontaneously like this is also fun. Thanks!  

Kat
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19 posted 05-31-2000 11:30 PM       View Profile for insect   Email insect   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for insect

Well I'm still on my knee?
Are you setting me free?
It's been a big mess
Are you going to say………….

1) Yesterday is there to stay
    The memories won't decay

2) Your ass is mine
     Take off your clothes bring out the wine

3) Yes her and I are a thingy
    She's got breasts and a wienie

4) You asked me to take the change
    Here's cologne, your drunk and acting strange

5) Your ass is mine
    Take off your clothes bring out the wine

6) YES!! AGAIN
    HAPPILY EVER AFTER ON THE DESTINY TRAIN

7) Purr! Purr!

8) ?……( Any suggestions poets )..?..(And kat poet )


Mmmmmmmmmmm!!
    
kat
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20 posted 06-01-2000 08:43 AM       View Profile for kat   Email kat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kat

LOL..You crack me up!!!

You’re ass is mine?
Is that what you said??
Well not in the way
That would involve a bed

Yes! Take off your clothes
You’ve been wearing them all week
For God’s sake, look at you!
Smell yourself! Can’t you tell you reek?

For many, many months now
I’ve been, as you put it, nagging you
To just wash up once a day
And change your clothes, is that too much to do?

So now you’re down on one knee
With the ring I just threw
Asking, “Will you marry me?”
After I told you we were through

For the maid of honor you wanted my friend
I knew that already because we met
And you’d stare every time she’d walk
Until you found out it was Claude, who is now Claudette

Here, Give me your hand I’ll help you up
You’re drunk. You’ve asked me that question before
And by the way, bring out the wine
I found some in the closet, but I’m afraid there may be more
Hmmmmmm, you’re brother is here
No! Don’t answer. I’ll answer the door.
LOL

Kat


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21 posted 06-02-2000 02:42 AM       View Profile for insect   Email insect   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for insect

Th….th…thanks…thhoney!!
I ddrunk all th..m..money!!!
M..mmy goddess, ttake me on tthiss floorrr!!
I'dd love mmake up sssex at tthe front ddoor!!

Can yyou hellp my with me clothes!!
At Oh insect yyou misssed ya rose?
It'ss onlyy b..b..been sex…six dayys
So drink, I can't spelll….smelll anyways!!

Cann yyou bbring ssome m..m..more b..b..b.boozze!!
I'lll soberr up aftter a little snnoozzze!!!
Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzz!! Snort!! Zzzzzzzzz!!!
Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzz!! Snort!! Zzzzzzzzz!!!

Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzz!! Zzzzz!! Zzzzzzzzz!!!
Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzz!! Zzzzz!! Zzzzzzzzz!!!
How did I get down here?
Must have been all that beer!

Wow!! Look what time it is
Man I got to take a bursting wiz
What's my brother doing here?
I really got to stop drinking beer

Why does he got my wife's underwear on his head
I guess his ears were cold when he went to bed
It looks like they got drunk and passed out
I wonder what that's all about

I think I'll go have a coffee with Claudette while they sleep
At least she doesn't think I'm cheap
That Claudette, she so strong and tall
And I've never seen such a beautiful woman play tackle football

Why can't my wife be more like her, she's quite the prize
Imagine her naked, boy I'd be surprised
I wonder what my wife was saying about her last night
Ah!! Couldn't have been important, we probably had another fight

THANKS for playing along with this for so long kat
It's like War of the Roses
LOL
Mmmmmmmmmmm!!
netswan
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22 posted 06-02-2000 03:35 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

rotflmao  hahahah love it. I did not
have time to read the responses; will read
later.
hahahahah am in stiches with the girl
friend who changed hehe

~netswan  GREAT writing my friend!
kat
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23 posted 06-02-2000 09:38 AM       View Profile for kat   Email kat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kat

netswan thank! I've been having alot of fun with this also it's taken a life of it's own. LOL. Glad you had fun.

Kat

Psst!!  Hey Big Ben! Get up!
You’re drunken brother
I think he’s up

Geez! Take my underwear off your head
He’ll think we’re up to something
Get off my bed

Wait! Listen! Is that Claudette downstairs?
I mean Claude? no! Claudette?
I mean, I mean ..Ahh! Who cares

What the heck is she um he doing here
Did he call him I mean her over?
To have beer

I think he’s got a thing for Claude/Claudette
If he thinks she’s hot to trot on the outside
He ain’t felt I mean seen nothing yet.

Oh insect? What are you doing down there dear
Did you invite someone over?
Is that my friend you invited here?
Let me introduce her to your brother

Remember what I told you last night
Get too close to her
And you’ll be faced with quite a sight

Big Ben, can’t you tell by the feminine masculine voice she has
You’re brother is going to have a spaz

Especially when he sees the tools she’s carrying
His fantasy, no longer will her tools, I mean, she be bearing
LOL

Kat


Insect I can say the same to you. Thanks! Yeah, it is kind of like War of the Roses.LOL. When I wrote the original poem I never thought it would develop into anything like this but this has really got me laughing!LOL
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24 posted 06-05-2000 12:50 AM       View Profile for insect   Email insect   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for insect

Claudette…care for a coffee or tea or some brunch
Here! You have Adam's apple, he didn't eat for lunch
No! Just a tea!
I'm having coffee

Hey Hun! Look who's here
It's Claudette the queen of no fear
Claudette…ya gotta meet my bro
You and him should have a go!

Hey Ben! Meet Claudette
Take her for a ride in your vette
Ben are you ok, are ya feeling fine
What's on your face, looks like a panty line

Hun why do you call him Big Ben?
You know something I woke up at the door again!!?
You should have HELPED ME TO BED!!
OR IS THERE SOMEONE ELSE INSTEAD!!?

You don't love me anymore do you?
The love has to be with two
And you know damn well what I mean by two
Are you………….

1) Through

2) Throwing up at the site of me

3) Throwing me out the door

4) Tired of all this fighting

5) Thinking of another man

6) Thinking of another woman

7) Thinking about a divorce

8) Through and throwing up at the site of me because your
thinking of another woman

9) Too worn out by Big Bend over…I MEAN BEN!!! To talk
        about this right now!

10) Ready for a change because when you say "It's you" you
know I will never change as a"CREEP".

11) …?…….( Any suggestions poets )…?…( And kat poet )

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R  O  T   F  L  M  A  O              
Thanks for playing THE GAME netswan . I wonder if everyone
knows what those letters mean.
Hi kat…LOL and ROTFLMAO too!! And THANK YOU  
Mmmmmmmmmmm!!(N R)
 
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