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Mike
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0 posted 05-26-2000 12:07 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mike

Questions, never to be answered questions,
Now lost in curses of man's ambitions,
Set adrift; bereft of thoughts inclined,
Whilst echoes through silent chambers; cloistered mind,
Sorrow of my sorrow, what hast thee wraught,
As rob of dreams from shallow grave unsought,
I am like you, with sister and brother,
Betrayer of all hopes, in silence smother,
As dark shadows rest on sunken grave and vault,
Listen, then listen hard, to pain's exalt,
Adrift upon this sea by trust betrayed,
I shall attempt no seige nor escalade,
For I know thee, as now I know my face,
Scourged by scorpion, midst gulfs of space,
Nevermore eschew the sufferer to borrow,
What hast thee wraught, sorrow of my sorrow.
© Copyright 2000 Mike - All Rights Reserved
netswan
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1 posted 05-26-2000 01:48 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Mike this is seriously deep
and vivid in torment - I do
not believe in Hell so it is
hard for me to identify with
such anquish - well written.

~netswan
Mike
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2 posted 05-26-2000 08:04 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Thank you for the read and comment netswan.
Denise
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3 posted 05-26-2000 09:30 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent writing, Mike, as always!

Denise
Corinne
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4 posted 05-26-2000 09:48 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Hauntingly beautiful, Mike.

Corinne
Martie
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5 posted 05-26-2000 11:46 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Mike--You paint with such dark color this poem that hurts with grief...very well done!

You have exceptional poetic talent, my friend, and a hug from me.
Kit McCallum
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6 posted 05-26-2000 11:57 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

I absolutely loved your wording and flow Mike  ... they contained almost a haunting quality. Exeptionally well done!

Best wishes,
/Kit
brian madden
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7 posted 05-26-2000 03:02 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

dark and powerful,
I loved the lines

Adrift upon this sea by trust betrayed,
I shall attempt no seige nor escalade,
For I know thee, as now I know my face,
Scourged by scorpion, midst gulfs of space,
Nevermore eschew the sufferer to borrow,
What hast thee wraught, sorrow of my sorrow

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Meadowmuse
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8 posted 05-26-2000 10:33 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Your rhythm in this piece is nearly as fetching as the words and message, themselves. How to honor such poetic proficiency but to say I shall read and reread. Wonderful...

~ Claire

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Mike
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9 posted 05-27-2000 08:16 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

I almost didn't post this as I did not know how it would be received.  So I do ever so much appreciate the comments and especially those about the flow and rhythm, as to me that is what I was trying to achieve.
Nan
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10 posted 05-27-2000 08:46 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I know of no work you've produced that wouldn't be received well among our very discerning Passionate poets, my Kryptic Kansan.... Kansian.... friend....

This is exceptionally well done, and you're quite versatile, ya know?? ..
 
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