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Lighter To The Candle

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Lost Dreamer
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0 posted 04-29-2000 10:48 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Lighter To The Candle

Lighter to the candle
say's one must ignite
to hold crystal symbols
of dark prismatic light.

Doorway to illusion
lights path unknown
soft calm shadows bowing
as I dance fleetingly.

Reaching up hand skyward
lost with winged angel
one with life's delusions
I'm cast away alone.

Seeing age old visions
creep slow through phases
teen years beckoning me
as days erase my time.

[This message has been edited by Lost Dreamer (edited 04-30-2000).]
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doreen peri
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1 posted 04-30-2000 09:19 AM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

Gloria, you did a very good job with this. Since I saw it from it's initial stages and now read the final results, I can honestly say that it is MUCH better now. It has a lot of depth and feeling to it. Nice work.
Denise
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2 posted 05-03-2000 10:52 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wow! How did I miss this one? Gloria, this is great! I especially loved the last verse. Very well done!

Denise
Michael
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3 posted 05-03-2000 10:54 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Wow... this is a great piece Gloria.  The symbolism is remarkable.  Wonderful job.

Michael
Lost Dreamer
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4 posted 05-09-2000 05:06 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Doreen: Thank you very much, and I appreciate your guidance.  

Denise: Thank you so kindly glad you enjoyed.  

Michael: Thank you very much.  
hoot_owl_rn
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Ah, the flame burns strong   Nice use of symbolism in this piece and it flows nicely  
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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This is lovely.  I especially love the line "as days erase my time" - beautiful imagery.
poetFemmeFatale
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Ooohhh, no fair!  Rosemary picked my fav line too!     "As days erase my time..."  WOW.  Fabulous here, and I think I can relate to this, with my 30th birthday not too far away!  hehehe  I know, not even close.  
Denise
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8 posted 05-10-2000 08:17 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This candle needs to shed a bit more light, so up you go!  

Denise
REBECCA ALLYN
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Great poem!!
I can't wait to read more of your work!!!

LOTS of LUV,
Becky
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10 posted 05-10-2000 10:45 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Gloria, I like your style in this one. Nice work.
 
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