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Lighter To The Candle
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Lighter To The Candle |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow 
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Lighter To The Candle Lighter to the candle say's one must ignite to hold crystal symbols of dark prismatic light. Doorway to illusion lights path unknown soft calm shadows bowing as I dance fleetingly. Reaching up hand skyward lost with winged angel one with life's delusions I'm cast away alone. Seeing age old visions creep slow through phases teen years beckoning me as days erase my time. [This message has been edited by Lost Dreamer (edited 04-30-2000).] |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Gloria, you did a very good job with this. Since I saw it from it's initial stages and now read the final results, I can honestly say that it is MUCH better now. It has a lot of depth and feeling to it. Nice work. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! How did I miss this one? Gloria, this is great! I especially loved the last verse. Very well done! Denise |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow... this is a great piece Gloria. The symbolism is remarkable. Wonderful job. Michael |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Doreen: Thank you very much, and I appreciate your guidance.  Denise: Thank you so kindly glad you enjoyed. Michael: Thank you very much. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Ah, the flame burns strong Nice use of symbolism in this piece and it flows nicely |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
This is lovely. I especially love the line "as days erase my time" - beautiful imagery. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Ooohhh, no fair! Rosemary picked my fav line too!  "As days erase my time..." WOW. Fabulous here, and I think I can relate to this, with my 30th birthday not too far away! hehehe I know, not even close.  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This candle needs to shed a bit more light, so up you go! Denise |
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REBECCA ALLYN Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 91Lima,Ohio |
Great poem!! I can't wait to read more of your work!!! LOTS of LUV, Becky |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Gloria, I like your style in this one. Nice work. |
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