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~Adrift~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
In a moment of need and perhaps weakness ... I allowed my self to again feel ... to again breathe. Exhausted from struggling in these chains, I granted my heart a desperately needed reprieve. Searching for sanctuary in the depth of love's warm waters ... I let the illusion take me down. First baptized by your beauty, now cold waves of reality cover me and I have begun to drown. I only wanted to feel like me again, I only wanted to help you ... again breathe. How naive and blind love makes us ... God, how it hurts when the heart has been deceived. I'm too weak to swim back to safe harbors ... I'm just too damn tired to fight the tide. Caught in the current of this pain, again destined to drown in these tears I cant keep inside. I have only myself to blame ... I always give too much of me -- away. I only need a little distance to fall, I feel like this time -- I've fallen to stay. I surrender to the losses ... I've been here so many times before. Adrift on this ocean of emptiness ... praying for rescue ... but your no where to be found on shore. Janet Marie < !signature--> Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 04-22-2000).] |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Sounds like you have a good handle on the beginnings of finding you again... i enjoyed this poem very much. Thank you for posting it. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Janet, I agree with the above, You have a wonderful talant and good feelings you will survive. *L* |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Janet, Personally I think this is the best I've ever seen from you. This piece has all the emotion of love and heartache all rolled into one. Your talent shows exceptionally well here. Thanks for sharing it. All my love, Jeffrey |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Never blame yourself for giving too much away... at least that's what I'm told.... I do the same thing. In both senses... I give too much away too quick, AND I blame myself for the pain that it causes. [sigh] I feel every word of this one. Hopless romantics we are!  Maybe we should just run away together and have a little fun to bring your spirits up! Go read one of ol' Balladeer's poems, that should help a little. =) And if tht doesn't work Sven's got one up about his feet turning blue. =) {{{{ HUGS }}}} Hope things get better for you. Don't give up on love! That would be a terrible waste of sucha big heart! "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Janet, I must admit though the subject is sad, you did an amazing job here. I do think this is one of my fav's. Now that does not mean you should keep writing sad poems. Thank you for sharing this. Parker |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Jm...what can say. You my friend, said everything here. Thank you so very much for being there for me when I needed a friend the most. A truly wonderful and inspirational poem to me. Your friend, Marina |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
-Jan As one of your biggest "fans" I must say exceptional work my dear friend! this poem conveyed the deepest feelings from your soul...(i can tell). this was incredibly sad but also very truthful. thanks for being able to share the depths of you. love always, amy ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
Wow~ This is powerful JM~ So beautifully written~ Marie~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Janet, it's never a weakness to feel need. It does cause vulnerability, that's for sure, but the weak are those so afraid they cannot let their guard down. You did a wonderful job here. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well expressed, Janet Marie. I'm sure everyone can relate to this feeling of being adrift at one time or another. Denise |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Janet Marie, this is a lovely poem and so full to the brim and flowing with emotion! Wonderful! I pray you wholly find yourself again, that you may no longer feel adrift. Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
"I let the illusion take me down..." Girl, this line says it all. Don't feel bad, I too, have allowed myself to be drawn in...that's why I'm so skiddish now. Once you've fallen THAT hard, your knees stay pretty wobbly for awhile after...Keep your chin up girl, and keep writing these, you're helping me too, as you write. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Wow, 'ol Balladeer does have some wisdom in that head...I guess he's talking about me there...(sigh) Truth hurts sometimes, but I'm not afraid to admit it - I'm weak.  Hey, if you and WhiteNite are gonna go run off together, can I go along? If you two start smooching in the bushes, I promise to turn my head! ehhehehehe Girl, this poem is fabulous. You are doing so good here...release, and breathe. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 S.S. This is heartwrenching and beautiful... I have only myself to blame ... I always give too much of me -- away. I only need a little distance to fall, I feel like this time -- I've fallen to stay. Ahhhh yes but do we know any other way to love? I once promised myself that when I loved heart and soul again I would remember to save a piece for myself...easier said that done is it not?? Angel Wing Hugs Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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