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At Sunset
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At Sunset |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
 At Sunset I sit and watch the evening sky, And, silently, I wonder why, The radiant sun just seems to die... At sunset. The morning is a distant star, A voice that beckons from afar, Beyond this hour that shadows mar... At sunset. The time has passed, for sunlit schemes, For fond desires, and fervent dreams; All hope is swallowed up, it seems... At sunset. And, yet, as evening draws toward night, A chariot, in its timeless flight, There's peace within the fading light... At sunset. For, in this quiet hour, I find A chance to leave my cares behind, And take a stroll within my mind... At sunset. And, so, I will enjoy this time, When heaven and earth so oft combine, To make, of life, a lovely rhyme... At sunset. -Troy J. Hoecherl- © Troy J Hoecherl All Rights Reserved Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is absolutely fantastic, Troy! Very beautiful! Denise |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Stunning ! "This is where you will win the battle .... in the playhouse of your mind." Maxwell Maltz |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Within your words a quilting warmth, in day where sun is a promise, broken, and clouds caress in chilling clasp this heart that dreams of your sunset. Beautiful writing, Troy... ~ Claire |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Thanks to all of you, for your kind words! Denise - thank you so much! I guess my love of nature really comes out in my poetry. BTW, kudos on your correct answer to "Hip, Hip, Hippie..." in Q & A. You go, girl!  Pepper - thanks! The truly "stunning" thing was the incredible sunset that was the inspiration for this poem. We have some really pretty ones, here in Utah. Claire - WOW! I am honored that you shared your gift, in response to my poem. Sounds like things are a little rocky for you, though - I hope they get better, soon! Again, thank you all for responding! Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Troy, Love that sunset, beautiful job. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (edited 04-21-2000).] |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Most beautiful! Sunsets are wonderful! I enjoyed much.  "It is in our aloneness that we recognize our oneness, even as the single droplet of water knows also that it is the sea."Daniel *Cassie Roseen* |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Excellent writing.....will now look at sunsets in a different light (so to speak) Liked the rhyme used in this and the layout. Nice work. A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Thanks to all of you! Seymour and Danny - You two were fellow "nominees" for the "Hip, Hip, Hippie..." post. Does that make us brothers? LOL! On the serious side, I appreciate your comments more than I can say. You are both talented poets, so your praise means a lot! Dawn Eclipse - thank you! Sunset is one of my favorite times of day - sunrise being the other one. Some of my best poetry has been written at these two times. Thanks again to all of you for your support! Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Very nicely done. Enjoyed muchly. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Troy~ A vivid display. I also find both the sunrise and the sunset to be inspirational. This is lovely. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Mike - thank you kindly! Marge - aside from the beauty of the sunrise and the sunset, I think the reason that they inspire me so much is the continuity. The sunrise is a new beginning - a fresh start. Sunset is a time for reflecting on what I have accomplished during the day. And, it's not really an ending, because it starts the cycle all over again in a few hours. Again, thanks to all of you for responding! Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Openings and closings are perfect new beginnings...like sunset and sunrise...they turn a page with light and dark and complete the circle of the day.. Your poem is beautiful! |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Aaaah!! The beauty of a sunset....you capture it so well....an inspiring poem on an inspiring sight. Beautiful! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Martie - so true! The Great Mandela (Wheel of Life) keeps turning - moving over rocky ground, and smooth - but always moving onward. So glad you enjoyed this poem! ESP - thank you so much! And, I also must credit Nan - she let me use her "bird at sunset" gif to decorate this poem. Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Troy, Another very thoughtful and touching poem.I enjoyed it very much. David2 |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
WOW!!! Troy this is amazing work. You have captured the essence of "heaven and earth so oft combine" Truly masterful writing m-friend. I love you man, Jeffrey |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
This poem is absolutely beautiful, in form, in verse, in feeling! And what a picture, visually as well! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Troy, Thank you for the sunset. Very nice and well written as usual. It is a wonderful sight and should be enjoyed as much as possible. Just breathtaking to watch it over the water. Great writing!! Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Troy - simply devine ----oh how I love to look out over a sunset, especially over the water. Great piece of work Hugs from netswan |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 You've captured the perfect time of day in a beautiful light. Thank you for sharing. |
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