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Lone Ranger Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 92Salvador , Bahia , Brazil |
I made this poem , because today I was really feeling down because the person I'm in love with only seems to ignore me... Unseen Am I a ghost? For the people I love don't seem to see me They rise and vanish day after day Only to appear in some other way But I'm alive I'm shouting But my scream is not heard I feel like I'm confined... I'm doing my best But this pain in my chest Is corroding my soul And it may last forever It's destroying my heart But I can't fall apart I must stand on my feet I must get up and fight Or I'll NEVER be right I can't give up without trying It's the same as to surrender And I don't want to seem a pretender I shall be sincere I must face the battle Or forever and ever I shall remain A ghost... "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free It was always thus and always thus will be" Prof. Keating Dead Poets Society [This message has been edited by Lone Ranger (edited 04-18-2000).] |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Lone your not a ghost and your poetry is seen! liked how honest your were with your feelings!  |
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Lone Ranger Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 92Salvador , Bahia , Brazil |
Thank you , RH!! And I know that my poems are seen , wat I meant is that the person I love seems to be forgetting about me... anyway , thanks!! "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free It was always thus and always thus will be" Prof. Keating Dead Poets Society |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Lone Ranger - another masterpiece! Keep trying - maybe this person just needs some help removing the blinders.  Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
This was very well written, the construction made it very easy to read. It was also very emotional. I enjoyed it. David2  |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Ranger you sure are off and running. High Oh Silver Away, back to the top you go. |
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Lone Ranger Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 92Salvador , Bahia , Brazil |
Thank you guys! Hsystems , you're dawn right we have always to keep on trying An Lucky , humbly speaking I think I'm always off and running... "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free It was always thus and always thus will be" Prof. Keating Dead Poets Society |
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Lone Ranger Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 92Salvador , Bahia , Brazil |
I put a little explanation on the poem now it's more understandable... "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free It was always thus and always thus will be" Prof. Keating Dead Poets Society |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
No need for explanation--this ghost is perfectly clear...(sorry couldn't resist) a painful place to be in---glad to see you don't give up without a fight tho. Thanks for the read... |
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