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TheGoalie Junior Member
since 2003-06-15
Posts 47Poughkeepsie, Ny/Long Island, Ny |
Hi all. By the way, I'm new here in case you can't tell. I'd appreciate any honest criticisms you might have, and I'll do the same for you. Oh, and for those of you keeping track at home, these two poems ("Shadows and Light" and "Wishing Star") were written for one girl, one while we were dating, and one after she broke up with me. Can you tell which one is which? Anyways, thanks alot. I like to have a place to get feedback on my writing. Later ya'll. -Shadows and Light - There are those in our lives That slowly fade away, like stars vanish With dawn’s first grey light. Brilliant and vibrant for a short time, They disappear forever, never Seen again in our night’s black sky. Still others leave their mark, Their light too bright and powerful To ever truly go away. They haunt our lives, our dreams. They fill our souls with being, Impressing our hearts ever more. But you. You are my moon. Always there, never changing. Shadows and light dance across your face, Hiding this side or that, but if I look I can see you there behind them. Breaking through dark black clouds Or shadows cast by an overbearing sun. So goodnight my green eyed angel. I’ll meet you in my dreams tonight. Until I hold you in my arms again, I will look at the sky with wonder. Watch the moon play shadow games And feel your light upon my heart. |
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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk |
hello and welcome to you. I read your other poem first and then this one but maybe i should have read them the other way around. They are both beautiful and you have a very romantic heart. your poetry flows well and gives clear and beautiful tender images. its lovely to meet you and i for one will look forward to more of your words. hugs from june xxxxxxxx |
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TheGoalie Junior Member
since 2003-06-15
Posts 47Poughkeepsie, Ny/Long Island, Ny |
Thanks June. I really appreciate your assessment of my work. It's nice to know that i'm not just writing to hear myself talk (so to speak). I hope to post a few more poems when i get the chance. Oh, and by the by, I really enjoyed "Relaxing". I don't think i can look at a bubble bath the same way again. "Ain't Got no quarrels with God, ain't got no time to grow old. Lord knows I'm weak, won't somebody get me off of this reef" |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Dear Joe, this is the 3rd poem by u that i've read so far. i really like ur style, u've got an uncanny eye for deciphering emotions Love Michelle If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ [This message has been edited by midnightblues (06-15-2003 11:07 AM).] |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Welcome to our corner. I've not had time yet to read all your poetry but I will. this was great. Joyce |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
I think this one is first poem for your girl. Very nice. I wish I write like that! Eliza Simmons ~Every girl has a dream within. ~Yesterday insult, today gain. [This message has been edited by aries_luv_ppl (06-15-2003 04:22 PM).] |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
this is just to add it to my library Eliza Simmons |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
just beautiful |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
The Goalie: I really enjoyed this poem! Haven't had a chance to read your others, but I will and welcome to Passions. Hope it's an enjoyable experience for you. Betty Lou Hebert |
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