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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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Reflections of you, found deep within me, when you try to be perfect, and I try to be me. When you can't understand, the word goodbye, and I can't understand, why why why. When the innocence of one, becomes to hard to maintain, make impressions on me, so I'll be just the same. Another perfect lifeless doll, that can't feel the love or the hate, waiting for the perfect person to come along, so that maybe they can open the gate. Into another world, to make impressions on you, we can't help the way we are, that's just what we do. Reflections of you, are being rid of me, I don't want to be perfect, I just want to be me. Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Wow Allysa!!!I like this one...Good message you are sending out about yourself...Keep up the good work!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Erin: thanks. there is a story behind this poem. This guy I used to like always tried to be so perfect and he was, and he tried to make me perfect and shape me into one of those snobby ppl, well, it didn't work. I just want to be myself and I don't care what ppl think. (And Justin taught me to just be myself) Allysa Ps. Justin and I are talking again Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
The worst thing about people like that is when you ask them for help and they just look at you...As if in their head they are saying "is she taking to me" LOL...Well its good to hear that you and him are talking again!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Allysa, no one is really perfect, even if in your eyes they are. That is just love blinding you. When you are older and wiser, you will see there is always room for improvement and there is nothing wrong with admitting it. Don't ever let someone change you into someone else. You are who you are and have to be happy with yourself. There are those out there who will love you for you. This was a very well written poem. huggz * just some friendly advice from someone much older than you. ~Wynter Bliss "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
"I don't want to be perfect, I just want to be me." I really like this ending, and stay strong in your stand against people changing you from you. Nicely done poem  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Erin: Don't you just hate it when you say hello to someone and they just look at you and go "are they talking to me? they aren't special enough to be talking to me." Wynter Bliss: hmm, I though I was pretty wise. Lakewalker: I'm glad you like it. Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This poem is great. It shows that you are a strong person. So many times in life girlfriends/boyfriends can try to shape us into what they want. Alot of the times we do it to ourselves. When you can finally feel comfortable with yourself and realize your self worth, is when you are going to find the perfect person for you. Great poem Keoni |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This poem is great. It shows that you are a strong person. So many times in life girlfriends/boyfriends can try to shape us into what they want. Alot of the times we do it to ourselves. When you can finally feel comfortable with yourself and realize your self worth, is when you are going to find the perfect person for you. Great poem Keoni |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Sorry about the double post, at least it will bump the poem |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The poem was great. I liked the last two lines. Being perfect is this idealistic imaginary piece of BS that somebody made up. Forget perfection completely......just concintrate on being a good person for you and yea........kick butt!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Slim Junior Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 49Kentucky, USA |
Allysa.. luved the poem.. i can relate to this, so it does appeal to me personally.. but i thought it was a very good representation of how you want others to see you. good affect! keep on keeping on! Slim ps: glad to have gotten to know you better "just because you dont know it or havent seen it, doesnt mean it isnt possible" |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Thanks all for replying. Dopey, you crack me up man! I love you! Allysa Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
thru time, you have become one of my favorite poets in here. This is another great poem written by a great writer. Keep it up. I love the last 2 lines  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
acire, you're making me blush! I feel special now! Love ya man! Allysa Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
great poem alyssa. a girl shouldn't have to feel forced by a guy to change. you expressed that very well. great poem! Curlz "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Allysa~No no I love it when you say hello to someone and they just keep walking as if you are talking to someone else and not them...Then people look at us like we are crazy like we are talking to ourself... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Kittie Member
since 2000-07-08
Posts 103 |
This is such a wonderful poem! You really do a wonderful job with this, even the imagery and promoting the dominant emotion- it's just really powerful and great! Thanks for sharing this, Kittie |
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~*~PrettyGirly~*~ Member
since 2000-11-04
Posts 83Fitchburg Ma Usa |
Hey that was a good poem. Your just like my friend Allissa she is a really good person she is helpfull...Bye ~*~Minna~*~ "Be a friend, Be a lover, Be mine" |
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JennyeMeshan Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 103Cecil, Wisconsin USA |
Great peom. You're sending a good message out to many. That's a good quality to have. If a man wants you to change. You're better than him if you fight and never give in. Good choice. I'm proud of you! Take care hun and stand your ground! YOU take control of only YOU! ~JeNnYeMeShAn~ "If thou can wait then thou shall stay" -Destiny's Child |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
Wooow, this poem is great I have read it like 5 times since you posted it but everytime I tried to reply there was some kind of mistake... my computer sucks! Anyway, this poem is so good, it remind me of a signature someone has (or used to have) that said something like it's better beeing hated for who you are than loved for who you are not. Yeah, I totally agree with that, you can't change into another person, you'll be fake, plastic, and you wouldn't feel better. Ohh, and I think that it's just great when you say hello to someone and he just looks somewhere else like I didn't see you. Your friend, Caz It's been raining since you left me. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Gee, thanks ya all for replying. I do believe this is one of my most replied poems and I just wanted to say thanks. I love ya all!Morning rain fell on my window, and I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be gray, put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not |
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