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The Webbing of Me
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The Webbing of Me |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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The Webbing of Me: Enchanted forest crashes down. My mouth was a smile, But now is a frown. I run as fast as time can run. I time myself, And the web I spun. Years are gone but minutes here. I walk amongst land That I fear to fear. Sip of water lost within. Trying to catch food So the web I spin. The tears of encantation delight Makes my mouth water, Yet my soul in fright. Insidious icycles waiting to be. I despise the cold. The web is me.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Yay I get to be the first to reply again! This is really great, I especially like "Years are gone but minutes here. I walk amongst land That I fear to fear." I'm confused though...I thought you were from..Puerto Rico(I think....??), are you not native to that country? You have to excuse my stupidity, I'm obviously easily confused. Keep it up amigo...hasta luego Bel Beautiful is empty Beautiful is free Beautiful loves no one Beautiful stripped me -"Beautiful" CREED |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Coolness. hehe that's all I have to say. ~Carly Better days are on the way, my friend, just a ways on down the line. I believe that just around the bend, everythings gonna be fine... |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Awesome Dopey, keep up the great writing. You always write thought provoking stuff! |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
nice poem! I love the way you describe the making of the web then at the end say you are the web. Sort of a way to look at one's life and see that everything we do makes us. Good poem There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line. -- Oscar Levant "Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live." |
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Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
i am from puerto rico.....i just dont write in spanish. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
hmmm...I liked it a lot...I really did...it was so...I don't know what it was, but it was really that... (that didn't make a-hella-lot-a sense...oh well...) **life is like an ice cream...the trick is not to get brain freeze** **I didn't loose my mind it was mine to give away** ~Robbie Williams~ |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
hey dope i really like the rhyme scene.. it flowed amazingly..this could also be a song maybe... HUT TWO THREE FOUR! HUT TWO THREE FOUR! the clowns on parade the clowns mascerade rip off your face rip off your brain the clowns on parade -me |
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