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jeremydraul
Senior Member

since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

0 posted 2000-10-01 11:00 PM

Those lonely dark skies are filled with sparkles of light
They capture my thoughts, and remind me of you at night
Standing beautiful, mysterious, and glowing in a special way
Just the sight of you always seems to help pass the day

With these stars, I hope and wish you know how I feel
Deep inside these feelings stir and show they’re real
You’ve crossed my mind many times, leaving paths
I’ll never get over that special way that you laugh

I wave, say hello, and adore everything about you
In a confused state, I don’t know what to think or do
I melt when you smile, your eyes seem so bright
Without you, there is nothing special about this night

"I will know where I'm headed, 'cause I'm so tired of the suffering,
I stand before you, a weakened version of your reflection."
~DMX~ "Prayer III"

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

1 posted 2000-10-01 11:05 PM

I loved how you tied this into the night sky, it's written very well. This poem is awesome jeremy!

anomaly187
Member

since 2000-06-15

Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US

2 posted 2000-10-01 11:42 PM

hey jeremy this is really amazing and heartfelt..i absolutely love it...the words you use just come out at me..

HUT TWO THREE FOUR!
HUT TWO THREE FOUR!
the clowns on parade
the clowns mascerade
rip off your face
rip off your brain
the clowns on parade
-me

AngelShell
Member

since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

3 posted 2000-10-02 01:45 AM

hmmm, this is very good...I also like how you tied it in, very good...

**life is like an ice cream...the trick is not to get brain freeze

**I didn't loose my mind it was mine to give away**
~Robbie Williams~

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

4 posted 2000-10-02 02:13 AM

Jeremy~
This is really good...I really like how you used the stars as an example...A beautiful piece...And very sweet too!!!Its good to see you posting more work...I havent seen you lately...Keep it up buddy!!!

It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe.

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