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anomaly187
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0 posted 2000-09-16 09:11 PM


self-promotion..please respond to this and go check out my previous poem called Serene Ecstacy..and please leave replies because i am desperate!!!..and for the record this is not peer pressure..

The lights are dimmed
where nothing grows,
Meet me in the grove of groves.

The heart has stopped
in mid-life beat,
This is the fall of something sweet.

Your trembling eyes
meet me half-way,
Your final breath was yesterday.

The earth has chosen
to cast you out,
Now you've lost your final bout.

The skies rip open and out falls nothing,
never had faith, stayed away from pollution.
You talked to me in shadowy dreams
and told me i had nothing but still i should be.
I choked on blood and spilled my cup,
this is the key to unlock my cuffs.
My heart atrophies in the sea's embrace,
Death then love, there is no place to be.


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"'I am the the lizard king
  I can do anything
I can make the earth stop in its tracks
I made the blue cars go away


[This message has been edited by anomaly187 (edited 09-16-2000).]

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Child of the Stars
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1 posted 2000-09-16 10:20 PM



  Oh my...this is so..I don't even know an adjective to describe it. I don't know what to say except I loved it...words are definitely your friend...and to think a fellow 9th grader could think so deeply! *sigh* you're talent amazes me...

  ~carly

Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars.

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2 posted 2000-09-17 12:50 PM


I usually reply with a large quantity of words so im just going to say this in regards to what child of the stars said: Ditto




I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US
3 posted 2000-09-17 02:25 PM


replies definately make a person feel good...and i am lucky to get 2 responses that really did the job! carly i can't even to begin to thank you enough..i am speachless that you like it so much..and dope whenever i get replies from you it's great...and i know i should jut tell myself it is the quality of the response not how many there are....heh

"'I am the the lizard king
I can do anything
I can make the earth stop in its tracks
I made the blue cars go away

Erin
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Posts 2527
~Chicago~
4 posted 2000-09-17 07:26 PM


anomaly~~~You pressured me into writing this reply didnt you???Of course you did cause it was a good piece of work...As usual...I wish that I could write the way that you do...But we are 2 different people that dont have the same mind...Oh well I just admire your work...keep it up...

~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~

Deranger
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since 2000-05-10
Posts 498
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5 posted 2000-09-18 02:01 AM


Ah…feeling so pressured…cannot resist…must submit…ah!!! Can’t control!!! Ahahaha

*Twitching violently*

Ok, now that I’m here, I’m beside my self by this assault of literary talent…yeah. I liked it…
Especially the last part, it was delicious!  Take care…

In-wishing-peers-were-less-pushy  

THERE IS NO SPOON!


Spreading insanity, one post at a time

Singing, "If i die before i wake..."


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