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Teen Poetry #3

READ IT! But it ain't special

UNC STAR
Member

since 2000-06-19

Posts 67
Hinesville,Ga,USA

0 posted 2000-09-11 11:32 PM

How could you do this? I ask myself
Walking around the room as I pace myself
Trying not think of serious wealth,but
Trying to think of other peoples health
but inside I know they didn't mean any bad
But I can't help it cause the feelings are sad
If you ever need money don't steal or kill for it
But think of a way to work with it get a job or
do something that is going to profit you your wife or kids if its any of this and listen to others they probably know the biz.

I came up with that right quick. STAR

What ever happens so let it happen unlees you don't want it to happen.

Jose Marti
Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 374
washing DC

1 posted 2000-09-12 12:07 PM

that was a pretty slick poem(or rap if that's what it is) I like your style a lot. I hope to see a lot more. I also like the positive message. Sort of a welcome change.

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

2 posted 2000-09-12 12:24 PM

What a poem!!!This was really good...You send out a positive message along with writing a good piece of work...I cant wait to see more just like this...

~*Each day is a treasure box from God, just waiting to be opened*~

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

3 posted 2000-09-12 08:08 AM

I like this, it's awesome, as a poem or a rap it could be either. Thanks for replying to my poem and I can't wait to read more. Peace/
Allysa

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

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