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anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
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0 posted 2000-09-08 01:46 AM



she tells me i am beautiful
her lies stain my eyes with blood
i am your priceless creation
(the disgust in you is the hate in me)

she dreams a colorful afterlife
as if i'm not already scarred
open sores and pussy lips
(the disgust in you is the fear in me)

such pretty plastic hiding faces
staring at my beautiful mangled body
i am what you make me
(the abnormal vessel is the death of me)
(the intolerance of you are the tears of me)


"Serve the servants- oh no.
That legendary divorce is such a bore" "i'm on warm milk and laxatives/cherry-flavored antacids"

© Copyright 2000 Alexei - All Rights Reserved
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
1 posted 2000-09-08 02:36 AM


i dont know what to say except that this was intresting...In what way im not sure either...

~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~


anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US
2 posted 2000-09-08 10:03 AM


just had to ask..what are you not sure about?

Now night arrives with her purple legions
Retire now to your tents & to your dreams
Tomorrow we enter the town of my birth
I want to be ready. - JM

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
3 posted 2000-09-08 10:18 AM


WOW! I'm speechless. This poem was wonderful! You have an interesting view on things I must say! Your last poem was great too (I thought I should add since I forgot to reply for some reason)I couldn't think of something this intriguing. My poems are usually pretty blunt. Yours are different and I love them! Keep it up!
Love Always
~*~Jessica~*~
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~*~   If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.   ~*~


[This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-08-2000).]

Dopey Dope
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4 posted 2000-09-08 06:39 PM


i think the poem kicked ass.......keep writing bud, i love your work!!!!!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Lani_DarkOne
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since 2000-05-28
Posts 152
UK
5 posted 2000-09-09 10:45 AM


WOW..This is one of the best I've read here..
Different and original...
One of the ones you could interpret in many ways..
Keep it up..

"Controlling my feelings for too long....
And forcing our darkest souls to unfold...
And pushing us into self-destruction...."
*~Muse*~

sorrowfulangel
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 59
Memphis,TN
6 posted 2000-09-09 11:18 AM


what can i say?this poem rocks....

"god is the biggest under-achiever I know,something good happens god is great,something bad happens,he now works in mysterious ways"

Child of the Stars
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Ann Arbor, MI
7 posted 2000-09-09 12:55 PM



You have a way with words that made my soul shiver...I loved the poem.

  ~carly

Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars.

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