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I'm Drowning In A City
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I'm Drowning In A City |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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I'm Drowning In A City I'm drowning in a city, with yellow streets and tomato plants, with stained glass and string. I'm drowning in a city, with plastic faces, purple swirled lies, depths of pain and concrete. I'm drowning here, with coffee stains and pink rain puddles, with sidewalks and smoke. I'm losing the battle, with oarless boats and cobblestone paths, with tangles and fruit and you,... I'm drowning in a city. [This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 07-28-2000).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hey you, this is another awesome poem. Drowning in a city..love it. |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Great one! I loved the concept Peace DkW Once there was a darkness Deep and endless night You gave me everything you had Ahhhhhh you gave me light |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
I see alot of colors and images here..very good!!! Liked the title as well. The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Spitfire I certainly know the feeling and you have captured it perfectly. "A frog, it cannot comprehend the sea Nor me happiness" Paul Draper-Mansun |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
WoW!!! This was just such a swirl of color and light. Excellent. Nice poem. Hardrock |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Great poem SpitFire. Very vivid imagery. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderful description and feeling in this poem... I think I live in that city. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Drowning in a city, or drowning in a flat in a city. A lot of pictures here, fire. Liked it a lot! Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Is this city Atlantis You mermaid poet you I love to swim in your ocean of poetry I put a poem in open 8 for you (ML's) Here some smiles  |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
SF, Like this one! New style for you I think. I am drowning in a sea of poetry over here!! LOL....some day I will get through it all. Great work and beautiful images my friend. Hope that all is well for you. Miss you. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Why do you always outdone yourself my friend? I am not complaining just complementing. Great work. Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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Lynne Dale Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 114Melbourne Victoria |
Great imagery. I like it a lot. I could almost feel the city taking my breath away. I specially liked the title. Kethry Kethry. When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole. |
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Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A. |
I like the images here. Its funny how all of the colours of a city tend to run together into grey. Well, in Cincinnati anyway. Sing while you may -The Prophet Q'spel Your pain is for you alone As it is As it was As it will be forever Amen -The Prophet Q'spel |
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