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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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Teardrops on my window, others call it rain. Pouring harshly from the sky it personifies my pain. Howling wind and crackling light, the earth knows how I feel. I scream and shout, and wonder why my life is so unreal. Teardrops on my window reminding me of you. God knows if I don't see you soon, my heart may split in two. |
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Cyndey Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 84Arkansas |
Catalina... Well-said, and beautifully put! I can relate so well how rain can personify your mood! A great poem indeed!  Cyndey "All that we see or seem, Is but a dream within a dream" Edgar Allan Poe |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Cat,...I love the line...'the earth knows how I feel'. *Sigh*,...I think it listens to me,...I think it speaks to me....I think you're right. Teardrops, raindrops,... if you just sit a minute and think about that word Teardrops,...think of how sadly beautiful they are. An actual secretion from a feeling...uuumm,..ok,..I'm going a little deep but your poem has just got me going. Loved it even though I wish the speaker wasn't hurting. Take care. *Peace. |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
A teardrop represents alot to me, that one teardrop tells about alot of pain. It represents lonely, sacred to feelings, just something about "teardrop" beautiful poem...hope things look up soon, I wish that for you everyday!! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wonderfully put and nice smooth flow. Enjoyed much. jwesley |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
oh how i feel this one thanks so much for posting it i love it so much. this reminds me of my true love and me you express your and my feelings so well. i know how you feel. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
This one is fantastic, cat. I'm really impressed! Oh, your name also includes the cats you love (I love them too). I'm a bit slow and only just noticed that, sorry to ramble! Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
This is really good! (but sad)  |
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ChibiDeathscythe Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128 |
Oooooh cat! This was splendid! It has such a sorrow... I love the 2nd stanza |
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Rex Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 482Houston, Texas |
catalinamoon....excellent, really enjoyed this one. I am well acquainted with teardrops. Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. -William Wordsworth- |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i'm so sorry that you feel that way right now. I enjoyed the poem though. I guess we write our best when it really is heart felt. |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
Beautifully crafted poem catalina. I loved it. You really caught the terrible sadness of these feelings in a very atmospheric way. Well done! Ällän |
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Dedreia Member
since 2000-07-10
Posts 172Kokomo, Indiana, United States |
Oh my God, this is my favorite so far. Thank you for the great poem. Dee |
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jezz_micah New Member
since 2000-06-30
Posts 8 |
Hey Cat, That was a very well spoken and written poem, i can completely relate how the rain can translate your moods. keep writting... ~Jessica~ |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Absolutely one of your best, Cat. I hope this one was up for book submission. Hardrock |
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