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Silent soul
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since 2000-06-10
Posts 73
tx,usa

0 posted 2000-06-23 06:40 PM


I posted this in one room but i want to post it here

Lucky is what you think
when you hear about this girl
she has everything she could possibly want
but yet doesnt go and flaunt

Is it the hurt she has inside
that she cant possibly deny
her life is great yeah its true
than why everyday does she feel blue

she has no more tears
she'll end it all right here
no one understands just how she feels
its a feeling she has that just says kill

would anyone miss her or even care
she thinks to herself no who would
and ends it all right here for good

Please reply

bye 4 now
Silent


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SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

1 posted 2000-06-23 07:43 PM


~Wow uuummm,....*sigh*....this poem is so sad in it's truth.  Not that nobody would care because that is all wrong...so many people the girl doesn't even realize would hurt to see this happen.  I meant truth as to I have known girls that I have thought were so "Lucky" and seemed like they had it all....but inside they were hurting...and just wearing a mask for everyone else. This poem has got me thinking.  I truly hope whoever this person the speaker is speaking about can see sunshine and find a way out of her darkness.  Please take care. *Peace.
Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
2 posted 2000-06-23 08:43 PM


I've seen this girl so many times.....trying to live up to expectations set by society, family, the school, all those around her.  And yet no one knows the anguish, the pain, the insecurities inside.....till the only avenue of escape is eternal darkness.  To all of these I extend my wings....let me embrace you in the folds, shielding you from all, till you are strong enough to emerge and take your place in the world once more.  You have entered the realm of angels here in Dark Passions....we will protect you.
Amazing what a few words on a computer screen can bring forth from those who read them, isn't it?  This poem brought forth some honest emotions within me.....I am here for all.

Silent soul
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since 2000-06-10
Posts 73
tx,usa
3 posted 2000-06-23 10:02 PM


Why thanks for replying

bye 4 now
Silent

Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
4 posted 2000-06-24 12:18 PM


Yes Silent Soul, this girl ?? it's just to close to home for me right now, I might post a poem on her, she didn't make it. It was to much for her.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Silent soul
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since 2000-06-10
Posts 73
tx,usa
5 posted 2000-06-24 01:02 AM


what? joel

Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
6 posted 2000-06-24 01:55 AM


yes sometimes it is to much for anyone to deal with alone sometimes we all need a friend. well good writing and good luck.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

7 posted 2000-06-24 04:29 AM


A very good poem indeed... sad and final.  Very touching.
AVANTI
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
8 posted 2000-06-24 04:57 AM


good peom and like hardlock said honest words bring out something in us...


If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao


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