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Longing, Lonely, Sweet Tonight

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 06-19-2000 10:29 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

Would I could
erase the past
while saving parts
that are best in me,
all of that--
it would be done--
as sweetly as
a whisper, "please..."

If I could feel
the trace of finger,
echoes of your words
in linger,
if I could break
this fever--
sweat--
still I'd not
be done for
yet.
If I were sun,
and you were dew,
I could not, would not,
diminish you.

I'd reverse all laws of universe,
if only just to breathe your breath.
© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 06-19-2000 11:27 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

yes yes yes
a taste of serenity at its sweetest...
perfect reflection me twin
*breathing 1n*
ahhhhhhh
me loves ya ...
jm
Parker
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2 posted 06-20-2000 12:38 AM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

serenity, love it love it....voting...

Parker
X Angel
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3 posted 06-20-2000 01:03 AM       View Profile for X Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for X Angel

Serenity,
this was divine. I hope this is a definite inclusion in the book. Loved it muchly.
~Heather
spiked
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4 posted 06-20-2000 02:08 AM       View Profile for spiked   Email spiked   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spiked

"If I could"
You did and you can.
Really great poem Serenity
Rich
Sudhir Iyer
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5 posted 06-20-2000 02:12 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Serenity,
Could emotions get better than this? I know not!!!
.......
I'd reverse all laws of universe,
if only just to breathe your breath.
.......

Muchly enjoyed as I drown into the words here...

regards, sudhir.
Kit McCallum
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6 posted 06-20-2000 06:59 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

The sentiments and the format are wonderful Serentity ... just beautiful!

Best wishes,
/Kit
Justbleu
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7 posted 06-20-2000 07:38 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Very cool style!!  I enjoyed this very much!!

Bridgette


"Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side
Marge Tindal
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8 posted 06-20-2000 07:45 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Serenity~
This is lovely.
~*Marge*~


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with you


9 posted 06-20-2000 09:30 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Serenity~Wow! This is GREAT!   -SEA  *vote*

Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB

wayoutwalt
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10 posted 06-20-2000 11:55 PM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

serenity glad i saw this one yuh yuh
linda munday
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If only just to breathe your breath...
Absolutely fantastic... love your poems, this one especially.
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12 posted 06-21-2000 01:58 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

S'en,
Another awesome poem. You are able to take pain, longing, desperation and need, and turn it into something sexy and almost harmless. If that's not strength -- if that's not an awesome poem -- then I'm insane!

Mike
serenity blaze
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13 posted 06-21-2000 06:28 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

I would like to thank all, but especially Mike for the "sexy and almost harmless"--sounds like an insult but exactly the mood I was striving for...and to my muse---don't you believe that for a second!

thank you much me friends...
Colin
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14 posted 06-22-2000 06:47 AM       View Profile for Colin   Email Colin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Colin

Serenity, the only words I can use to describe this poem are "serenely beautiful".

Eric.

"We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka.
CMGrimm
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15 posted 06-22-2000 06:54 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

I loved it serenity...

chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.


Rex Allen McCoy
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16 posted 06-22-2000 01:12 PM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

serenity
This
To me ... is one of your best
... pure poetry ...
LoveBug
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17 posted 06-22-2000 02:00 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

This is a beautiful poem! It definently belongs in our book!

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea
Cerenity
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18 posted 06-26-2000 08:29 PM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

Hi Serenity,

This is so wonderful, I very much enjoyed.

Love,  Cerenity


[This message has been edited by Cerenity (edited 06-26-2000).]
Balladeer
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19 posted 06-26-2000 08:32 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Poetry gets no more beautiful than this. I love it.....
A Romantic Heart
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20 posted 06-30-2000 03:09 AM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

Lovely my dear!
WhtDove
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21 posted 07-04-2000 12:26 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Wow breathing a big sigh! What we wouldn't do for love  
serenity blaze
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22 posted 07-14-2000 10:31 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Wow...thanks everybody, as this is my sentimental favorite...written for the sweetest one...so...mind if I spin again? lol
Elizabeth Santos
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23 posted 07-14-2000 11:42 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Serenity,
I would call this amazing
And I would call you an outstanding poet
And I would vote for this in a minute
And I will
Liz

Ps Wouldn't you know, I signed off and forgot to vote, but it is now officially voted for

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 07-14-2000).]
serenity blaze
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24 posted 07-18-2000 12:20 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Elizabeth, I cannot begin to tell you how much your reply means to me.  I am honored.
 
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