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A Whispered Wish for Secret Friend
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A Whispered Wish for Secret Friend |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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A certain wind that beckons from out of season's place... Paradise in blanket spread-- patterns of the leaves to trace. Endless sky of summoning, a hand of comfort over mine-- silent song among the trees, the ceasing of relentless time. All of this was given free-- simply, for I had the need. A miracle begun in me-- the change of water into wine. And oh if I could make you see, you'd know you are a gift divine. I'd do for you, what you did for me-- make nightmare of your memories, each tear, a star, forever shine... |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
serenity..... "Each tear, a star, forever shine..." You know that this is a beautiful poem, don't you?? I love poetry that includes nature, and this does it so well. Very nice writing, my friend...... Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Serenity, this shines... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
O serene one... WOW... this is incredibly filled with enchanting images... beautiful metaphors _______________ Paradise in blanket spread-- patterns of the leaves to trace. .. .. A miracle begun in me-- the change of water into wine. .. .. (and a sharp ending...) make nightmare of your memories, each tear, a star, forever shine... ... in other words... wonderful poetry regards, sudhir. Ah your pen-name has inspired me to write a poem... soon, I will put it forward... I hope |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Girl this is fantastic! Maybe the goodness will rub off on me. Ya think?  Excellent imagery! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
All of this was given free-- simply, for I had the need. A miracle begun in me-- the change of water into wine. And oh if I could make you see, you'd know you are a gift divine. I'd do for you, what you did for me-- make nightmare of your memories, each tear, a star, forever shine... ============== and by the gift of this wish... a secret friend will know the gift of serenity in their life... so very lovely and kissed with your grace me twin... love the anticipation and possibilities I see in this *smiling at you baby* *winkie winkie* me |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
What a wonderful wish for that special friend...lovely thoughts |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
sunny1--thanks you! Always, you are so kind to me... Sunshine--you also live up to your name... me gratitude is grinning at you... Sudhir--I'd travel to India just to hug you, besides, I hear there is a beautiful waterfall there I should see...thank you Dovie--I just had the loveliest dream about white doves, will have to e ya later...thank you for your prayers and compliments and encouragement... Janet Marie Jane!--me so lucky to have you for a friend! still a bit floozy, I mean woozy, I owe you some e too, I know...Lovin' ya much over here! Hugs. Paula---have been enjoying your work much lately as well...thank you ever so much... I think there is a piece of every one of you in this poem. Okay, so that is not so lovely imagery, but I haven't had me coffee...thanks to me Forum Friends...Love to all.... |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
I'd do for you, what you did for me-- make nightmare of your memories, each tear, a star, forever shine... Well done Serenity. You've done so well expressing yourself lately. Rich |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Serenity--this poem feels like laying in peace finally after a long hard climb, so beautiful in its mood and message and imagery devine...wonderful writing sweet one. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wow! Serenity this poem is deep and full of inner strength...it is so beautiful in so many ways that are hard to describe. If I could reach you I'd give ya a big hug!! |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
serenity, "each tear, a star, forever shine..." This poem is so very beautiful. You've really outdone yourself on this one, my friend. Michael |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
So nice to see smiles riding your heart these days. I see many positive possibilities in this and you as well. This is a lovely poem and one to remember for sure.  |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Very beautiful but I think there is alot hiding between the lines almost a poem within a poem....a story?? Anyway great writing... Julie :) |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Serenity - oh, baby - this really rips! I can feel the promise of something firm in your life - standing against wind and rain. great poetry |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Serenity this poem does not shine nor dazzle it absolutely blinds the reader with its brilliance. "Beyond all this good is the terror,The grip of a mercenary hand,When savagery turns all good reason, There's no turning back, no last stand,"I.Curtis |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Rich--thanks, it helps to know what the hell you're feeling before you try to express it--ha! me taking one day at a time too... and I must bunch everybody else up in a big group hug....so thank you all again, time to put on that supermom suit! Later lovies, hope to be back reading...kisses. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW serenity, this is really really beautiful! Loved it |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ 'A certain wind that beckons from out of season's place... Paradise in blanket spread-- patterns of the leaves to trace. Endless sky of summoning, a hand of comfort over mine-- silent song among the trees, the ceasing of relentless time.' ... and we call thy name Serenity ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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