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Prelude to the dance
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Prelude to the dance |
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Eddie de Jong Junior Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 27 |
Every moment every detail Of our contact oh so sweet In the passing of each hour Through my mind will oft repeat Every drop of raw emotion Be it joy or be it pain Join together in a torrent Quench my soul like gentle rain As the turmoil slowly settles Like the calm before a storm Rise an inner peace so swiftly Leaving thoughts all soft and warm Like a river gently flowing Free from all the strife within Touch our souls so very lightly Slowly let the dance begin [This message has been edited by Eddie de Jong (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The title drew me in! Your words are exquisite...love it! Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
welcome to Passions, Eddie ... a very nice entrance indeed ... nice work ... thanks for sharing ... My calling before me, let quill be my offering; For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive. M.A. |
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Gossamerwings Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 207 |
I love this! Keep writing, you do it well! Also title drew me in.  Welcome to P.I.P ! Gossamerwings |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Welcome to our Passionate Place - You've made a nice entrance with this poem... Check your email for a special greeting.. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a perfect flow to these beautiful words Eddie ... enchanting! Welcome to Passions!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Welcome to Passions. This was wonderful and the flow was perfect! |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
 this was a beautiful addition love this verse As the turmoil slowly settles Like the calm before a storm Rise an inner peace so swiftly Leaving thoughts all soft and warm ~~soft smiles Maureen [This message has been edited by MMoonchild (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
the meter, rhyme, and message.... are perfect! wonderful piece of work |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family! You sure know how to make an entrance! With a good poem. |
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Eddie de Jong Junior Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 27 |
Thank you all for the wonderful welcomes and words of encouragement. Not only is this my first post, but also my first ever attempt at poetry. The verses simply flowed as an expression of emotions, but it was very scary opening those emotions up to public scrutiny. Thanks again. E |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
ah nothing to be afraid of here! you did a wonderful job...the flow and feeling of the poem are incredible. Welcome!  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Smooth and refreshing writing...you have really captured your feelings...James |
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Eddie de Jong Junior Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 27 |
James, Thanks for the kind words. I am tempted to say "Call me Mr Smooth" but that might detract from your meaning. E |
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Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A. |
Very nice indeed! Welcome to this haven for Romantics. I've always thought that there is something magical about the dance. You have woven that magic into an incantation. Well done. Sing while you may -The Prophet Q'spel Your pain is for you alone, As it is, As it was, As it will be forever, Amen -The Prophet Q'spel |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
So beautiful this is.......Exceptional play of words. I enjoyed this immensley. Thank yoou and welcome, you will fit right in here! Jenn |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Eddie, Wonderful poetry here, so very much enjoyed, and welcome to passions. Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
With much delight I read your poem and compliment you on the flow of rhyme N ohhh such sweet expression! Irresistable read for me tonite Eddie...thank you Coco |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Oh what a great debute!!! Welcome to passions! I really enjoyed the poem and the title is really screaming for attention Great job! Take care! |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Eddie let me begin by saying....WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!!...Most excellent first post and first poem. I hope and trust you will love it here as much as we all do. Juls |
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