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The Painting

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Martie
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The Painting

The painting had hung
for years in this spot,
purchased for the light
that shown like a kind of reverence.

She squinted into its radiance
and stepped inside the landscape
where she could smell damp earth
and hear leaves rustle
with lizard-tail scurry.

The sun tinged
the side of the adobe building
auburn and cast long shadows
from the spreading eucalyptus tree
across the door.

A man in a long cloak
gazing from the open door
was stained
with the color of the sun
across his face
to holy.

The sky was white,
and blue brushed the trunk
of the birch tree.

Two woman talking together
in hushed voices,
feathered sound across
the stone walk-way.
Their faces were unoccupied
until she closed the distance
and could see the pencil outline.

From all around she could hear
the hum of the past,
the center of life
where the hammering
of nails into the missionís cross
was pure and hope-filled,
and so placed at the peak
in simple symbol
it humbled the sky.

Something was hidden
behind sea green leaves,
mottled like moss and swamp
to almost black
and as she rubbed her eyes
and backed away
back into the room
where the painting hung,

it rang sweet and sure
and real.


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Nan
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1 posted 03-19-2000 07:53 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

My gosh.. This one takes several reads, Martie..

To become one with a painting - and to make that happen through words... That's quite a feat, my friend...

I'm duly impressed, I am...  .. This is wonderful..


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2 posted 03-19-2000 08:10 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

WOW! Martie, this is fantastic! As soon as I realized that you were 'going into' the picture I was reminded that my youngest daughter does that too! She's been doing that since she was little! Daydreaming herself into the scene! I think I will try it! You've made is sound so exciting!

Denise
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Martie, Martie, Martie
Shaking my head in disbelief. You take me to a place I've never been, paint a picture more real than the real, make me a part of it, then meerly step back, as though nothing unusual happened. I'm going to dub you the "Virtual Reality Poet". What is there left for you to write? I guess we'll have to wait til tomorrow to find out.
I am stunned
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Martie...your imagery with this one is intense. You've painted a masterpiece again my friend  
Martie
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Nan--Thanks so much for taking the time and reading several...I am so please you liked it.

Denise--I'm so glad to hear of someone else doing this...It is so much fun.

Liz..You are so sweet...who knows what tomorrow brings

Ruth...Thanks so much for liking this

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You have described exactly how I feel when I read one of your poems. I walk into them, am consumed by them, experience the pleasure of them, taste their flavor and then, after the final line, return to my chair and rejoin the world. Beautiful work, Martie.
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Breaking News Story
MGM now stands for My God Martie

You are something else, lady !
How do you do it?
The very idea leaves me breathless !
You're just the best.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~
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I used go "into" pictures too,...when I was younger.  This is absolutely amazing how you put that experience into words!  Beautiful and just absolutely amazing!  
-molly aka sam

 Fleeting World
"Thus shall ye think of all this fleeting world:
A star at dawn, a bubble in a stream;
A flash of lightning in a summer cloud,
A flickering lamp, a phantom, and a dream."
-from the Diamond Sutra, translated by : A. F. Price -- found in Teachings of The Buddha, edited by Jack Kornfield


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Wow!  Marge, how do YOU do that?  MGM-stands for Mega Great Marge ...love you!

Sam--You know what I mean then...thanks for understanding.
Martie
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Sorry, I missed you deer, and you, the king of gracious and kind replies that make me feel like a queen...thank you.
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You blew me away with this masterpiece, Martie ....
Exquisite .... There are a whole page of adjectives that I could write here ....... I am left in awe .....
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This blew me away Martie ....
Exquisite .... I could list a whole page of adjectives here ...
..... I am left in awe .......
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Martie: MGM...   ...Marge said it so well...Oh my!

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