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Me Trying to Write Something Serious (like the good ole days)
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Me Trying to Write Something Serious (like the good ole days) |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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The moon sparkling on the waves I feel the fool of younger souls Why tonight I have sweaty hands I 'm far too old to lose control She knows that I am quite her elder Time's not relevant together As we gaze into the fountain Ripples spread from caged bird's feather I'd lose her grasp from sweaty hands That may betray she is the first To take my hand or kiss my lips Or simply free this caged bird's thirst [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 03-15-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
W.O.W.~ You succeeded in your attempt. Wonderfully done, my friend. I like the very idea of knowing the 'caged' bird has been set free. Hope to see more of your 'serious' stuff. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
Walt, Way to go I really like your style here. Keep them poems coming they are enjoyable.  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much, Walt!!! Well done! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
You done good, old friend - but you're NEVER to old to lose contol... Nice to see this side of you again, Walt. Michael |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Walt-a-roo great job in the serious stuff! Caged and set free, only way to be! <*\\\>< There's only two ways you can go... One way you can save your riches, And the other will save your soul. Rich Mullins |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very very nice, Walt! Denise |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Nice, nice work here Walt. Please sir, can i have some more? |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Very nicely done , Way Out . Doc |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Hey, I remember this poet! Serious or outrageous, you're one of a kind, Walt. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Excellent Walt, I enjoyed this poem! |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Nicely done, Walt. This definately is a far cry from your normal style, but still excellently done |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Does this mean that you're "outa control" when you're being serious? and "in control" when you're being wayout??.. Either way, it works for you.. Nice job, wow...  |
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