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Me Trying to Write Something Serious (like the good ole days)

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wayoutwalt
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The moon sparkling on the waves
I feel the fool of younger souls
Why tonight I have sweaty hands
I 'm far too old to lose control

She knows that I am quite her elder
Time's not relevant together
As we gaze into the fountain
Ripples spread from caged bird's feather

I'd lose her grasp from sweaty hands
That may betray she is the first  
To take my hand or kiss my lips
Or simply free this caged bird's thirst




[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 03-15-2000).]
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1 posted 03-15-2000 04:12 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

W.O.W.~
You succeeded in your attempt.
Wonderfully done, my friend.
I like the very idea of knowing
the 'caged' bird has been set free.
Hope to see more of your 'serious' stuff.
~*Marge*~


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2 posted 03-15-2000 08:47 AM       View Profile for Nurse Crachet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nurse Crachet

Walt, Way to go I really like your style here. Keep them poems coming they are enjoyable.  
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3 posted 03-15-2000 09:10 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I like this very much, Walt!!! Well done!
Michael
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4 posted 03-15-2000 09:27 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

You done good, old friend - but you're NEVER to old to lose contol...  Nice to see this side of you again, Walt.


Michael
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Walt-a-roo great job in the serious stuff!
Caged and set free, only way to be!

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One way you can save your riches,
And the other will save your soul.
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6 posted 03-15-2000 04:30 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very very nice, Walt!  

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Nice, nice work here Walt.  Please sir, can
i  have some more?
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8 posted 03-15-2000 07:39 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Very nicely done , Way Out .
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Hey, I remember this poet! Serious or outrageous, you're one of a kind, Walt.
Martie
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Excellent Walt, I enjoyed this poem!
Mistikman
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11 posted 03-15-2000 09:16 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Nicely done, Walt. This definately is a far cry from your normal style, but still excellently done
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Does this mean that you're "outa control" when you're being serious? and "in control" when you're being wayout??.. Either way, it works for you.. Nice job, wow...
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