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angelswing
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0 posted 03-09-2000 08:17 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for angelswing


Whirlpool gate .

Love is like a whirlpool,
It spirals fresh and new,
But the chances are it comes but once a life,
And wreaks havoc,
Destroys the true .
I have found my deepest dream,
My mind has found itís ecstasy,
But now I find itís all a lie,
A fraud,
A f*****d up fallacy .
This is why my mind canít take,
Much more of this love or life,
When I am found to gaze up at you,
A dilemma and a strife .
Iíll love you more than any man can,
Or probably ever will,
If happiness was deepest love,
Iíd be laughing,
Through and through .
My only dream and true desire,
Is if you would love me back,
In a world of dream and fantasy,
I know that for a fact,
Youíd be my one,
My reality,
My holy righteous love,
The one for which Iíd enter hell,
And try to bring you back .
Only now as I set sail,
On a course to peace,
And happiness,
I realise how incomplete,
The puzzle really is,
But how itís all just true lies,
Thereís no way back or forth,
The currents pull just leads me,
On and,
To my fated hour .
The act soon befalls my battered skull,
No flesh,
Defeated,
Sour .
This pain I know,
Just hasnít changed,
Oh woe,
Oh woe,
Oh woe .
The spin sucks me up,
And breaks my ship in two,
How life has stormed my port,
And as I sink,
I find my mind in clear,
Uncanny thought,
In death I have all I want,
The calm,
The piece .
The sweat,
Pure icy blue .

Written by Tom Baker


 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .
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BluesforNarada
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since 03-02-2000
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1 posted 03-09-2000 08:23 AM       View Profile for BluesforNarada   Email BluesforNarada   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesforNarada

Great poem Tom. It just shows people how fickle love can be. If no one can love and no one can lust, how can people live on in their lives? Keep up the good work - you're an inspiration to us all.
mete out
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2 posted 03-10-2000 04:50 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***Tom,
Fantastic mate.
I really love ths one...you speak so much truth in your poems it astounds me...you are wise beyond your years.
I am also confident that you will find true happiness....you most certainly deserve it..
love lou   xxx


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.
Enola
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since 02-11-2000
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3 posted 03-10-2000 05:09 AM       View Profile for Enola   Email Enola   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enola

Tom - you've out done me, yet again!  I ask you, how on earth am I supposed to compete with that?  You keep saying that you're good at nothing - you are SO wrong!  I believe you have finally found your vocation.  This is so good, I don't know why I bother.

 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.
Severn
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4 posted 03-10-2000 05:20 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Ouch - heartfelt stuff here.

sympathies and empathies coming your way...

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
infinat3 sadn3ss
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since 02-14-2000
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5 posted 03-10-2000 07:17 AM       View Profile for infinat3 sadn3ss   Email infinat3 sadn3ss   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for infinat3 sadn3ss

hi bake ,
         i read this the other day and i just thought id reply today to proclaim how good it was . keep going , you are on your way to being a great poet (not that you arent one already) . well done
cabes
angelswing
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6 posted 03-13-2000 10:36 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

Many thanks to you all, I am pleased that you liked it, and you all are at least as good as I am, because we all have a few things in comon, thanks for your inspiration. Keep writing more of your wounderful poems, so that I can read them and feel good inside .
Tom.
-x-
angelswing
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7 posted 03-13-2000 10:36 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

Many thanks to you all, I am pleased that you liked it, and you all are at least as good as I am, because we all have a few things in comon, thanks for your inspiration. Keep writing more of your wounderful poems, so that I can read them and feel good inside .
Tom.
-x-


 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .
angelswing
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8 posted 03-15-2000 10:21 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

Hey Kev, welcome to the family of friends, I wait with great expectations to read your poem that you have written, get it up hear as soon as possible .
Tom .


 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .
 
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