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Changing Tides

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0 posted 03-03-2000 10:44 AM       View Profile for christies heart   Email christies heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for christies heart

I am just an empty shell
of what was once before.
I speak feeble whispers
afraid to ask for more.

Like a hollow chocolate bar
I play a pretty part.
Yet emptiness is now contained
where once there was a heart.

While the tides run high and low
my clock speeds as it goes
around the face of Father time
who know one ever knows.

And in this battle for a self
that's good, strong and true,
I wait on our time's second hand
to bring me back to you.


 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer


© Copyright 2000 Christine R - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 03-03-2000 10:46 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Enjoyed reading this poem.  The creative use of time was well done.
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2 posted 03-03-2000 12:45 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I agree, well done, Christie!

Denise
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Danny and d.synder. Thanks for the mention on the use of time. This was written about some personal frustration and the time thing happened by accident. I am glad it sort of works.

 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer


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4 posted 03-03-2000 09:10 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Christie's Heart~
I also like the 'time' element.
Nicely done.
~*Marge*~


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While the tides run high and low
"my clock speeds as it goes
around the face of Father time
who know one ever knows.

And in this battle for a self
that's good, strong and true,
I wait on our time's second hand
to bring me back to you."

Chris, this is very well written...strong emotions expressed here...good analogy of time and the tides too. take care, jm

 When you see through love's illusions, there lies the danger...
And your perfect lover just looks like a perfect fool
So you go running off in search of a perfect stranger
While the loneliness seems to spring from your life
Like a fountain from a pool.

Jackson Browne

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6 posted 03-05-2000 04:42 AM       View Profile for christies heart   Email christies heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for christies heart

Janet Marie, Thanks so much as always for you sweet reply. Chris


 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer


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Very well written  
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"While the tides run high and low
my clock speeds as it goes"

Great analogy here, Chris. Enjoyed this poem!

~ Claire
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