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Gemini
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since 1999-12-15

Posts 1203
Wisconsin, USA

0 posted 2000-03-01 10:06 PM

           As I lay awake in bed.
          The silence of the night
                only broken
   by the sound of a distant trains' whistle.
              That same sound
         comforting, yet haunting.
              Like your memory.
           Close, yet far from view.
               I hold you close
             in thought and memory.
           As I clasp my hands in prayer
               around my pillow.
         Wishing for you a safe tomorrow.
              The trains' whistle
           drifts off into the distance,
          As your memory fades from view
            and I drift off into sleep.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2000-03-01 11:01 PM

Gemini,
Sensitive words, I enjoyed the read.

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

2 posted 2000-03-01 11:08 PM

In the haunting sound of a train whistle, you've captured that moment, when the mind flashes to thoughts of someone special, the last thought before closing you eyes. This is very beautiful
Liz

Gemini
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since 1999-12-15

Posts 1203
Wisconsin, USA

3 posted 2000-03-01 11:13 PM

Seymour: Thank you.
Liz: I appreciate your comments. Thanks for reading.

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

4 posted 2000-03-01 11:16 PM

Gemini, they way you captured and combined the fading of the train whistle with the fading of love's memories is extremely well done.

Gemini
Senior Member

since 1999-12-15

Posts 1203
Wisconsin, USA

5 posted 2000-03-01 11:37 PM

Balladeer: Thank you for reading and responding and for your words of kindness.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2000-03-02 12:36 PM

Gemini~
The whistle of the 'red-eye' special
just rounded the bend.

I like this very much.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

7 posted 2000-03-02 12:39 PM

Nice work, Gemini...

'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

Gemini
Senior Member

since 1999-12-15

Posts 1203
Wisconsin, USA

8 posted 2000-03-02 02:14 PM

Marge-Thank you for your comments.
Severn-I appreciate.

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