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The Distant Train

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Gemini
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           As I lay awake in bed.
          The silence of the night
                only broken
   by the sound of a distant trains' whistle.
              That same sound
         comforting, yet haunting.
              Like your memory.
           Close, yet far from view.
               I hold you close
             in thought and memory.
           As I clasp my hands in prayer
               around my pillow.
         Wishing for you a safe tomorrow.
              The trains' whistle
           drifts off into the distance,
          As your memory fades from view
            and I drift off into sleep.

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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 03-01-2000 11:01 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Gemini,
Sensitive words, I enjoyed the read.
Elizabeth Santos
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In the haunting sound of a train whistle, you've captured that moment, when the mind flashes to thoughts of someone special, the last thought before closing you eyes. This is very beautiful
Liz
Gemini
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3 posted 03-01-2000 11:13 PM       View Profile for Gemini   Email Gemini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gemini

Seymour: Thank you.
Liz: I appreciate your comments.  Thanks for reading.
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Gemini, they way you captured and combined the fading of the train whistle with the fading of love's memories is extremely well done.  
Gemini
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Balladeer:  Thank you for reading and responding and for your words of kindness.  
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Gemini~
The whistle of the 'red-eye' special
just rounded the bend.

I like this very much.
~*Marge*~


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Nice work, Gemini...



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life enriches writing'
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Gemini
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Marge-Thank you for your comments.
Severn-I appreciate.
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