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The Kiss
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The Kiss |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
The Kiss ******** a touch-- light and feathery soft your figertips to my lips as you silence me... a caress-- hesitant yet skillful your finger under my chin as you lean closer... a gaze-- long and lingering your eyes into mine as you search for an answer... a kiss-- gentle as a summer rain your lips to mine as I close my eyes... a rhythm-- quick and pounding my heartbeat into yours as they dance together... an emotion-- desire and anticipation your arms around my body as we melt into one... a journey-- slow and enjoyable your heart open to mine as I bare my soul to you... a ringing-- alarming and annoying sunlight in my window as I pry opem my eyes a dream-- it was all a dream a journey interrupted a sigh escapes me as I greet the new day it was nothing but a fantasy... |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
Too bad it was all a dream, I was starting to enjoy it myself. Wish I had dreams like that. I love the structure of this poem and it oh so makes me want to be kissed! Great read, bobbycat. |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
Thanks, Sonjes--glad you liked it!  Bobbycat =^..^= ~~Blessed Be!~~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BobbyCat~ Pretty gosh-darned good 'fantasy' and one FANTASTIC DREAM ! Go back to sleep ...... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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eyesplus2 Member
since 2000-03-02
Posts 163australia |
What a wonderful Kiss it was........that describes a kiss to a tee....very nice poem |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
bobbycat, Continue to have sweet dreams...lovely poem "...no single sound too rude Upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." --Edgar Allen Poe (from Serenade) |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
Marge, eyesplus2, and Poeminister--thank you all so very much for reading....I'm glad you liked it! Bobbycat =^..= ~~Blessed Be!~~ |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
I enjoyed this one very much. The kiss is the best thing in life, not to be rushed, but relished like it was the last time you would ever experience such delight. You captured it so well, and the way you did your lines really added to it. |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
Thank you, JML...that's exactly the thought I was trying to convey. I thank you for reading. Bobbycat =^..^= |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Liked the poem bobbycat. Especially the twist at the end. very descriptive stay cool  ~~Lavada~~ "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart somewhere to receive it".--Ivan Panin |
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