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RobertB
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0 posted 2000-02-12 07:03 PM


Sometimes


Sometimes it's not enough....
a cloudless sky
on a moonlit night
awaiting the arrival
of a flawless sunrise.
Sometimes it isn't enough
a springtime shower
on a desert bloom
parched from the heat
of a prolonged drought.
Sometimes it is not enough
to say I'm sorry
for a deed undone
as an afterthought
becomes the guilt of omission.


Robert


 if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.



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Rex Allen McCoy
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1 posted 2000-02-12 07:35 PM


About time someone said this ... and say it you did ... excellent ... I hope this gets well read throughout the internet

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Meadowmuse
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2 posted 2000-02-12 07:39 PM


Another thoughtful piece, Robert. I like the way you described your "sometimes" in this poem, with the last line landing soundly at the reader's feet. I enjoyed this!

Claire

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3 posted 2000-02-12 08:03 PM


You have a style I like very much, excellent poem here. I just visited your website and I like what I saw there also. Thanks for sharing with us.
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4 posted 2000-02-12 08:54 PM


You've made me re-think some issues that are currently playing out in my life.  That is what the art of poetry is for, I believe.  And you, sir, are an artist.
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5 posted 2000-02-12 09:20 PM


RobertB-
You are truly genius with your
thought process.
What a perceptive look at
a deed undone.
I enjoy your writing very much.
~*Marge*~


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6 posted 2000-02-12 09:24 PM


Excellent thoughts, Robert. Sometimes we try to make up for too much with too little and it's just not enough.....or something like that.
RobertB
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7 posted 2000-02-12 11:14 PM


Thanks all of you...this poem came from a life experience where I did not act when I should have. I looked the other way when I should have been paying attention.

Robert

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